Cynar

[Suz-zen]

--re-working-

[grant hayes]

This piece sounds and connotes in a manner that is perfectly publishable, Suz-zen. Your tune here strikes the contemporary chord, and also unmistakably bears your own voice, in its particular revel of sense and design.

[Suz-zen]

thank you thank you grant hayes ! After working with another group and feeling as though I am deaf and clumsy...it is a lift to my spirit to hear your comments and see your thumbs up on this one. It was birthed quickly, and yet I worked with it carefully over the past 3 days and nights. It felt ready as some do.

[amenOra]

Style matches rhythm pace and cotent busts and bursts. I like the delineation now clear betwen "publishable"as I've perused publications...

[Tony Grannell]

Hello Suz-zen, I have been completely and utterly taken away by this poem, truly. It is the poetry of ballet personified - embodying beauty, love and mystery as the author tiptoes like a ballerina into a dream-like pirouette of unique and beautiful verse. Outstanding! Regards, Tony.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

I'd not heard of cynar - regardless - the poem lifts me along to a wonderful dream-like moment at its close. Magical, melodic, beautifully Suz-zenesque!

[AlexandratheLate]

Suzzen I like how you take unusual things and turn them into magic like Cynar, an Italian bitter liqueur made from herbs and captivating us through ballet. Magical.

[lunar glide]

this is one of your most refined shares! polished and spontaneous is no easy combination. a dream!

[DWAYNE]

I agree with Mr. Hayes.

This is elegantly, uniquely yours.

One of my favourites.

[Suz-zen]

DWAYNE Hi and thank you for reading and commenting. It feels good to hear you say this is 'uniquely ' mine. Your poetry is completely you !
It helps me to identify my voice. Have a good night.