I'm unbeatable

[Tonysp]

i feel like my life is just breaking down
the earth feels like and earthquake beneath my feet
the anxiety is at its peak
i try to fight it off with my feeling
i try not to cry, they say men don't cry
i won't let anxiety break me
not today not tomorrow
my body hasn't felt this worse in a long time
its like hearing music on a record
the music is different, and you know thats not the beat
you are a burden on my sholders
threating to break down the muscle
but you will never take control of me
my love is strong
and my heart is not weak
and still the earthquake continues under my feet
i can't remember in a long time when this shakeness
hasn't stop inside of me
but the anxiety inside me will never take me over
i will beat the anxiety
and i will beat the tension
i will stay on to fight
i'm unbeatable

[Parkinsonspoet]

I like this and can relate to it--there is one very small thing that grates for me. The use of worse on the 8th line. It is an adjective that can be used as a noun but feels out of place and for me disrupts the flow

[Tonysp]

I agree when I read it again Thank You

[Suz-zen]

Hi Tonysp This description of anxiety and 'fighting it 'is well written. I don't know if you are familiar with of the musician/poetry of Chris Cornell? Lead singer-songwriter for many bands. He suffered from anxiety and depression and it sadly took his life a few days ago. Your poem and the following lines seem to resonate for me what it might have been like for him. I have been struggling to write something to deal with those feelings mixed with the feelings of another friend who had ended her life during a bad episode.



i feel like my life is just breaking down
the earth feels like an earthquake beneath my feet
the anxiety is at its peak


my love is strong
and my heart is not weak
and still the earthquake continues under my feet


Bringing the earthquake in is genius. That is just what an anxiety attack feels like to me sometimes. I have never been able to articulate it so.Thank you for sharing. Always call out for help when the ground starts to shake. It helps to steady the earth.

[Tonysp]

Yeah I was sick a couple months ago and since then I have this anxiety that won't go away

[Suz-zen]

It is a great help to write about this...Please do talk about it too.

[The second]

A poem of life a poem of tug of war. Nice. Anxiety feels so real but it is a state of mind