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    i feel like my life is just breaking down
    the earth feels like and earthquake beneath my feet
    the anxiety is at its peak
    i try to fight it off with my feeling
    i try not to cry, they say men don't cry
    i won't let anxiety break me
    not today not tomorrow
    my body hasn't felt this worse in a long time
    its like hearing music on a record
    the music is different, and you know thats not the beat
    you are a burden on my sholders
    threating to break down the muscle
    but you will never take control of me
    my love is strong
    and my heart is not weak
    and still the earthquake continues under my feet
    i can't remember in a long time when this shakeness
    hasn't stop inside of me
    but the anxiety inside me will never take me over
    i will beat the anxiety
    and i will beat the tension
    i will stay on to fight
    i'm unbeatable

  • #2
    I like this and can relate to it--there is one very small thing that grates for me. The use of worse on the 8th line. It is an adjective that can be used as a noun but feels out of place and for me disrupts the flow

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    • #3
      I agree when I read it again Thank You

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      • #4
        Hi Tonysp This description of anxiety and 'fighting it 'is well written. I don't know if you are familiar with of the musician/poetry of Chris Cornell? Lead singer-songwriter for many bands. He suffered from anxiety and depression and it sadly took his life a few days ago. Your poem and the following lines seem to resonate for me what it might have been like for him. I have been struggling to write something to deal with those feelings mixed with the feelings of another friend who had ended her life during a bad episode.



        i feel like my life is just breaking down
        the earth feels like an earthquake beneath my feet
        the anxiety is at its peak


        my love is strong
        and my heart is not weak
        and still the earthquake continues under my feet


        Bringing the earthquake in is genius. That is just what an anxiety attack feels like to me sometimes. I have never been able to articulate it so.Thank you for sharing. Always call out for help when the ground starts to shake. It helps to steady the earth.

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        • Tonysp
          Tonysp commented
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          Yeah I was sick a couple months ago and since then I have this anxiety that won't go away

        • Suz-zen
          Suz-zen commented
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          It is a great help to write about this...Please do talk about it too.

      • #5
        A poem of life a poem of tug of war. Nice. Anxiety feels so real but it is a state of mind

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