Bright and Shiny

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Bright and Shiny


new, or new to you
square one, stepped upon
gold bricked Ozzy road,
we goad each other
kind to kindred kind
to mold elusive
satisfaction’s glow
with words. one more show
of hands for muses
melodramatic
cue. memory fades
yet ever new comes
fancy’s fondled feat,
to seat itself quite
squarely for review.
joy-jumped or jittered
while poetic bug
digs deeper into
off-tossed matters flue.
smallest embers burn
beneath the old made
new, or new to you

[lunar glide]

wow RLW! the beat, the concept, the style, this is high marks all the way around for me 😁

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thanks LG - I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[AlexandratheLate]

Many likes Paula. I agree with Lunar. Great beat and rhythm.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Alex. I'm working again with interior rhyming, or what I call off-rhyme. Somehow it creates it's own kind of beat, a bit like syncopation! Thank you for the look, like, and comment!

[grant hayes]

A really musical delight, this, Rhymist, haunted by a lively Hopkinsy ghost. Brava! I balk only at 'fancy's fondled feat' - like finding too much sugar in one's tea at the precise moment nails are scraped down a blackboard.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Overly sweet tea and nails on a blackboard simultaneously - that would be torture! Sorry for that. I'll see what I can do about it. I get carried away sometimes.

[Tony Grannell]

Hello RhymeLovingWriter, 'Joy jumped or jittered and the 'old made new' like a shiny new penny. And many pennies for your thoughts in this outburst of poetic energy. I have very much enjoyed reading this. It's great poetry. Regards, Tony.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Tony! I'm always amazed, when learning new things (which is several times a day at least) how many new things there are to know. Some of them are wonderful, some of them are abrasive, but all of them are there, just waiting to be discovered. So much like Ecclsiastes 1:4-11, 'nothing new under the sun', but totally new to this little soul. Then, of course, comes the urge to write about it.

[mooneyblack]

Love this Paula, new for you!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Karen. For me, there is something new every single day it seems.

[rhymetime]

As I read I thought of us here in the Zone. We seek honest appreciation. You are right, there is nothing new about which to write but there are endless new ways to express it. It's not enough to be appreciated once. We crave repeated reassurance
That's my take

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you rhymetime - I like your take. In fact, I'd second it. I've learned a massive amount of interesting information - and felt both blessed and flabbergasted by exposure to alternative interpretation of some different works - during the whole past year of interaction with others in the Zone. It's all about learning, something new - and that almost always makes me smile. Thank you for the read and taking time to comment!

[N. Y. Sonnet]

Reminds me of the saying 'One man's junk is another man's treasure'... This poem is, indeed, a treasure!!!!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

LOL! Well, I'm glad it isn't junk in your eyes - though it very well may be someone's, they've been polite enough not to classify it so!

[N. Y. Sonnet]

If this was junk in someone's eyes, it would mean that they are blind.

[Suz-zen]

This is wonderful !! Thank you !

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Suz-zen! Good to hear from you.

[The second]

RLW I dont want to plagiarize the title so I will say this was jumpy and bright Thank you

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Ha Ha TS - close enough and it fits the mood of the piece nicely I think.