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  • Baa Baa Black Sheep

    ‘Baa, baa,’ bleats the big black sheep
    Just hear his boasting cries
    The sheepish king has no more wool
    When stripped of all his lies

    He’s used it all to pull it o’er
    Our eyes, whilst calling ‘Peace’
    For when we’re blind, how can we find
    The canine cloaked in fleece?

    And those who feel for foes, alas,
    Cry wolf too oft’ in vain
    He’s crept in underneath the flock,
    Slipped past each one-eyed brain

    Then we like sheep desert our Shepherd,
    Letting lead instead,
    The liar with the loudest voice,
    Whose teeth are stained in red


    At first I was only going to include the first two stanzas, but then upon further consideration, I decided to leave in the others as well. What do you think, O poets of the zone? Any thoughts/critique/feedback will be very welcome.
    Last edited by N. Y. Sonnet; 04-18-2017, 01:55 AM.

  • #2
    It looks like the lyrics to the song =)

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  • #3
    The metaphors are great as is the rhythm of this.

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    • N. Y. Sonnet
      N. Y. Sonnet commented
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      Thank you -- it was really fun to come up with the metaphors.

  • #4
    i'm glad you included the last stanza if only for the last two lines.

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    • N. Y. Sonnet
      N. Y. Sonnet commented
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      Thank you! The last line was actually the hardest to come up with...but I guess the extra time it took to think up was worth it.

  • #5
    Oh, I do love this.

    The whole thing!

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    • N. Y. Sonnet
      N. Y. Sonnet commented
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      Thank you, Dwayne! I'm glad you enjoyed; it was fun to write.

  • #6
    Well done N.Y. Sonnet, top of the queue!
    Last edited by Bobby Del Boy; 04-18-2017, 06:47 PM.

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    • N. Y. Sonnet
      N. Y. Sonnet commented
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      Wow, thank you! Gracious praise indeed!

  • #7
    I agree with LG about the last line. I also liked the last two lines of the 2nd stanza. I think it was a good call to include all four stanzas.

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    • N. Y. Sonnet
      N. Y. Sonnet commented
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      Thank you, that is reassuring to know!

  • #8
    A very clever, witty elaboration of the wolf-in-sheep's-clothing trope, N Y Sonnet. Zesta!

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    • N. Y. Sonnet
      N. Y. Sonnet commented
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      Your words are very encouraging, Mr. Hayes!!! Thank you for taking the time to read, like, and comment!

  • #9
    I absolutely love this

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