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    Faded Moon

    Like filled convective clouds before they burst
    He loved her with passion and conviction
    From the cradle to the ride in a hearse
    Until a symphonic valediction

    Such was his loves depth, a lifetime ago
    Never foresaw one day he'd be alone
    Now his tears water the weeping willow
    Using its branches to sweep her headstone

    Faded moon shadowed the end of their love
    As he watched the sunset and saw her face
    Beautiful angel, his only beloved
    Like colors from a prism he was graced

    Heartbreakingly their time came to an end
    Hurtful loss he tries to comprehend
    Last edited by AlexandratheLate; 04-06-2017, 04:47 PM.

  • #2
    Eloquent expression of loss and mourning.

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much Dwayne.

  • #3
    Very moving portrait of an enduring love, Alexandra, inspired by your parents, I presume? The flow is just right, and the emotion goes right through to the heart. I feel that the adverb 'regrettably' - qualifying the penultimate line, and, in a way, the whole sonnet - is too tame a word in this context; it seems distant and formal amongst the warm hurt.

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    • AlexandratheLate
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      After re-reading it, I agree - I changed it to heartbreakingly -that goes more with the intensity of the loss. Thank you Grant.

  • #4
    Again, you've written beauty out of sorrow.

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much Paula for the kind comments.

  • #5
    Oh Lord, married going on 32 years, I don't want to ever go through this myself. This is so well written and so terribly real life!

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    • #6
      Thank you Bobby. I hope not either - I've seen couples who were married many years go through this and it really is very sad. Looking from the outside in, though, I view them very fortunate to have had such a relationship - one I wish I had been fortunate to have in my life.

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      • #7
        Thank you very much Suz-zen for the like.

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        • #8
          Sadneess elevated to beauty by your skill at sharing emotion

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          • AlexandratheLate
            AlexandratheLate commented
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            Thank you very much Pp. I really appreciate your comments.

        • #9
          Hello AlexandratheLate, To live in constant heartbreak and yet your poem is most endearing, an endearing sorrow weeping love. It is truly a beautiful poem. Regards, Tony.

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        • #10
          Now his tears water the weeping willow
          Using its branches to sweep her headstone



          I love the way you crafted these lines AlexandratheLate

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        • #11
          This a is a beautiful reflection of an enduring and endearing relationship; thank you.

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          • AlexandratheLate
            AlexandratheLate commented
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            Thank you very much Mooneyblack. I really appreciate it.
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