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    My Winter coat

    My very beautiful gray winter coat
    I couldn't wait to wear for the first time
    In it I twirled, laughed and thought I could float
    All bundled up, gliding through wintertime

    No Hand-me-downs--this was my new gray coat
    A princess when I wore it the first time
    My feet never touched the ground-glide and float
    Sunshine through frosty air kissed the wind chimes

    The bus didn't know this was my new coat
    Then I felt the great splash for the first time
    Its tires didn't glide and didn't float
    My brand new coat was now covered with grime

    Happy feelings from material things, nice
    But temporary at best with a price

  • #2
    Wow, I love this! I was all wrapped up in your fanciful dream coat words, and then? You take an awesome turn to end it. Warm accolades mu friend!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you Bobby. It's a true story. There went my first new coat lol. 😊

  • #3
    So wonderful to hear your voice again. I love this verse. I love the way you allow us to appreciate material things without putting all our worth into them. Sad when we define ourselves by what we have rather than who we are.

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      I was hoping that's the way it would be read. Thank you very much Rhymetime. 😊

  • #4
    The actions so basic, youthful and believable - then you cap it with wisdom of ages. Very good AtL - actually - wonderful!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much for your kind comments RLW.

  • #5
    Realities untimely happenstance.
    I can relate!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      So true. Thank you very much Dwayne.

  • #6
    An innocent charming and important lesson. 😁

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  • #7
    A childlike innocence tempered by reality?

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Yes exactly the reality of unforseen mishaps. Thank you.

  • #8
    Alexandra, your distinctive voice sounds a fine pitch in this piece, told with such poise. I am so impressed at how you've structured this, with the words coat, time, and float being repeated at the ends of the first three lines of each quatrain. The childlike excitement at the coat is captured with vivid simplicity; the rhyming quatrains are done so well, with a perfect sense of narrative. Salutes galore!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much Grant. I was hoping the childlike excitement would come through.

  • #9
    Happy feelings from material things, nice
    But temporary at best with a price
    What can I say, another beautiful lesson, delivered beautifully.

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much Anatoliy.

  • #10
    this is a gem!! on many levels AlexandratheLate thank you for sharing this!

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