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  • Siphoned Currency (Inspired by In the Wee Hours, by Tanner)

    Untimely,
    did they call your passing,
    as if,
    there was
    a less lamentable hour.
    And I,
    my tears unceasing,
    wept,
    for the times
    you crossed my mind,
    and did not cross my path.
    Wept,
    for the words I felt
    but did not utter,
    now left
    to marble and mahogany fall,
    left
    to mourn, forbear and pall.
    Wept
    at the whittled hours,
    now tolled,
    for me to chime,
    Oh,
    the siphoned currency
    of time.

  • #2
    Such beautiful music echoing through your melancholy words... This is so touching!

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    • #3
      Thank you.

      Tanner's poem, which inspired this one, really made me reflective!

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      • #4
        Wow. Beyond beautiful here Dwayne! Soulful - that's what it is.

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        • #5

          DWAYNE, If I contributed in any small part to this inspired poem, I am most pleased. Exquisite, finely chiseled, monumental in its beauty. I think this masterpiece is one of your finest. You are at the height of your poetic prowess and your offerings flood us with grace that diffuse into our souls and adorn the walls of our consciousness. Thank you.

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          • DWAYNE
            DWAYNE commented
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            Tanner, your poem reminded me of the loss of my best friend, in a car accident, at the age of 16.

            It made me appreciate that, we must learn to cherish, from loss.

            That wisdom, is a gift to last a lifetime!

        • #6
          Very moving, DWAYNE!

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          • #7
            Sentiments that can easily be understood by someone who lost someone they cared about unexpectedly. Very well crafted.

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            • #8
              An elegiac grace pervades this in memoriam. Paced and pitched just right. Fine work, Dwayne.

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              • #9
                I am reminded to love now, embrace now, give now. Leave each moment behind filled with kindness.

                Thank you

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                • #10
                  Thanks all.

                  Every now and then, we need a reminder to cherish those we have, while we have them.

                  Thanks Tanner, for that reminder.

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                  • #11
                    DWAYNE, Thank you for rooting your loss in a historical context. This poem is truly flawless and masterful. Your short lines are a thing of true beauty - they allow the reader to pause and savor your eloquence.

                    You are motivating me to write a poem about my father and his last years, but I am not sureI am up to the task; your eloquence has raised the bar immensely.

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                    • #12
                      This is very touching and graceful Dwayne. It's so moving. Beautiful work from your inner core.

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                      • #13
                        Hello Dwayne, As if wept onto the page. Such sorrow, ineffable but for your way with words. Outstanding. Regards, Tony.

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