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  • You & I -Poem-

    I was confused,
    and I was conflicted.
    It’s amazing how such beautiful things
    can cause so much invisible hurt.

    I wanted you to know,
    that before everything started,
    I was an innocent girl.

    How time has changed things
    between us.
    But I always used to sing
    songs of joy,
    and I’d never let my words
    linger.
    I wish I could tell you
    so that you would know.
    But I’m just so afraid
    of who
    You and I
    will become.

  • #2
    I daresay forum users would be open to engaging with your poems, PainterOfWords, but most folk here do not respond well to excessive serial posting.

    Twenty-one successive shares is way too much. Slow down.

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    • PainterOfWords
      PainterOfWords commented
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      My apologizes, Grant! I just joined yesterday... I'll keep that in mind for future reference. Thank you for calling me out on that, now I know

  • #3
    Agreeing with Grant, but would also like to add that I like many of the poems you have posted, PainterOfWords . Yet, just as Grant mentioned, I cannot possible provide a meaningful reply to all of them shared in such a short amount of time. Generally, try to share 1-2 poems a day and you will find that many will gladly participate in discussing them.

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    • PainterOfWords
      PainterOfWords commented
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      I'm glad you like them... but my apologies for the spam, I didn't realize! Thank you for your suggestion... I'll stay within that range.

  • #4
    This is well done, PoW! It flows well which helped me feel the internal confusion of the narrator. I hope to read some of your other poems, but as said above, not all at once.

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    • PainterOfWords
      PainterOfWords commented
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      Aha, thank you! I'm glad you liked it. Yes... please forgive me, I'll make sure to post a couple times a day, if less. Thank you for your feedback

  • #5
    PainterOfWords this is the first of your poems that I have read. I especially like:
    But I always used to sing
    songs of joy,
    and I’d never let my words
    linger.

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    • PainterOfWords
      PainterOfWords commented
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      I'm glad you liked it! Thank you
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