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    We
    By: Imrogue

    walls expand
    between us—
    cobwebs of
    misery
    entrap us—
    memories
    deaden us—
    we converse
    distantly
    and in time
    we'll mute us—

















  • #2
    Words unsaid, often build the walls that separate us.

    So true!

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    • #3
      thanks for reading and for your comment!

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      • #4
        Hell imrogue, The claustrophobia of silence, a maddning state of mind expressed brilliantly in this poem. Excellent!. Regards, Tony.

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        • imrogue
          imrogue commented
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          Thanks for reading and for your generous compliments!

      • #5
        I love it!

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        • #6
          thanks for reading and for your comment

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          • #7
            I read WE and then walls expand in my mind I saw
            W-alls
            E- xpand

            Did you intend this for the opening?


            the opening in itself tells a story:walls expand
            between us—


            a lot of emotion cascading in 3 syllables
            Well done! Brava!! Not enough likes!!

            I LOVE!!

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            • imrogue
              imrogue commented
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              Sorry for this late reply. No, I did not intend that for the opening... that's a good thought tho!
              Yes, the opening itself tells a lot already!
              Thanks for reading and for generous compliments!

          • #8
            Ending of relationship - captured eloquently. Nicely done imrogue!

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            • imrogue
              imrogue commented
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              Thanks RLW!

          • #9
            Sad and true. Well felt imrouge

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            • imrogue
              imrogue commented
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              Thanks for reading and for the comments! :-)

          • #10
            Oh wow imrogue!!! From the two letter title to the two words per line this is so well done.

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            • imrogue
              imrogue commented
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              Thanks for reading Lunar glide and for your compliment! It's got 3 syllables per line :-)

          • #11
            Thin poem, needle sharp. Zesta!

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            • #12
              Thanks, Grant!

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              • #13
                imrogue I read this again this morning. I find it so powerful in the way the syllable count portrays the ending of communication between two people. Sad but true. Painful. Well done.

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                • imrogue
                  imrogue commented
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                  Thanks for reading it again Suz-zen! Thank you for your compliments! 😊

              • #14
                Very nicely done, imrogue! I've read it multiple times, and each time the title makes me think of Pat Benatar's ''We Belong'', then the poem tells me ''no longer.'' The contrast just makes your poem so much more striking to me.

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                • #15
                  Thanks for reading and re-reading Mutado1sb 😊 I'm glad you find it striking! I'd say I found myself I
                  singing along to Pat's song back in the days... and when I hear it once in a while...

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