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    Five years ago you left me here
    Steering life in perpetual rear
    Images rush in a somber reflection
    Remembering a sweet Mother's affection
    Memories invade a rather empty space
    Encasing a sadness only you can replace
    Your life flows through my looking glass
    Moments awake then slowly pass
    A tear escapes into a smile
    As pictures seem to laugh awhile
    Five years ago you left me here
    Steering life in perpetual rear
    Last edited by LovesDaisies; 01-26-2017, 05:39 PM.

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    I love the gentleness and flow or this peace, it reads easily and captures the heart.

    Thank you for sharing.

    Have you thought of "centering" this peace. Someone very wise, on this site, ask me that question and I loved the way the presentation improved the verse.

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    • LovesDaisies
      LovesDaisies commented
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      Like that? Is that what you meant

    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      yep that's what i meant. I think it has a beautiful form

      what do you think

  • #3
    Thank you for the advice and for commenting! I truly appreciate it

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    • #4
      rhyme-time I do like it better thanks again for the suggestion

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