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    In muck your sun, in muck your moon, in muck your history.
    In trash you born, in trash you raised, in trash you’ll buried be.
    This filth be damned, this filth become, this filth your destiny.
    A slave to waste, a slave to rot, a slave to poverty.

    Whose child of God, whose child of love, whose child cast down below.
    Where vile the sores, where vile the scabs, where vile the pus of woe.
    In sickness dwell, in sickness toil, in sickness, foul and foe.
    Know you the rats, know you the crows, know you what vultures know.

    Too young for scars, too young for wounds, too young for bleeding veins.
    To live depraved, to live defiled, to live in festered pains.
    The devil’s dump, the devil’s curse, the devil’s rotten gains.
    What faith possess, what faith confess, what faith in you remains?

    Some day you’ll die, some day escape, some day you’ll steal away.
    Till then the dearth, till then the dirt, till then in life’s decay.
    The lowest cur, the lowest cast, the lowest form of stray.
    So weeps the heart, so weeps the soul, so weeps the child of clay.

  • #2
    And so weeps my heart that these conditions can still exist in our world at all. I try to steer away from repetitive verse (because mine usually sounds hokey), but the way you've used it here creates a rhythmic, cohesive narrative. Top drawer phrasing with a powerful message. Out of the park Tony!

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    • Tony Grannell
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      Hello RhymLovingWriter, Weep indeed, beautiful children living off and in the residues of a throw-away and selfish society, disgraceful really. I think the repetitive verse works, in that, it was composed as a chant. Thank you very much for your fine and compassionate response. Regards, Tony

  • #3
    I like the rhythm and flow Tony! Sad poem.

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    • Tony Grannell
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      Hello imrogue, Delighted you enjoyed this one and I do appericate your constant support, very kind of you indeed. Regards, Tony.

  • #4
    Your technical bravura conjures an unrelenting horror and pathos here, Tony. Outstandingly powerful!

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    • Tony Grannell
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      Hello grant, You are indeed correct, an unrelenting horror, the crimes of men on their own children. Your response is, grand, encouraging and most appreciated. Regards, Tony

  • #5
    Very interesting write. I love the topic and the rhythm. Its different but it works perfectly. Well done, Tony.

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    • Tony Grannell
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      Hello Darthvader, I do thank you very much for your fine response and delighted it worked perfectly for you. Regards, Tony.

  • #6
    The rhythm in this drew me in, searching for hope that sadly was not to be. A very powerful delivery that demands to be read.

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    • Tony Grannell
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      Hello mooneyblack, From birth to earth and live in muck and hopelessness, sad indeed. Thank you very much and hope you are in fine health. Regards, Tony.

  • #7
    Oh my goodness. You let go with a fervor that somehow fits into a pattern. Amazing!

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    • #8
      Hello lunar glide, Great to hear from you and I do thank you very much. That you found it amazing, leaves me overjoyed, really. Regards, Tony.

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      • #9
        The power of this is Atomic! Really a wave of energy. Thank You Tony!

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        • Tony Grannell
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          Hello The second, You are very welcome and your response is most appreciated and valued. Regards, Tony.
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