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    Rolled quiet the dark on waters deep
    where drifts a dhow off Mozambique.
    To host the breeze when evening done,
    to coast the night, to wander on.

    Of grey a mood, a clouding moon;
    a lateen sail in eerie bloom.
    Into the dark where reasons yield
    to that which is yet unrevealed.

    A dreamer he who sails the night,
    knows not the ocean's turn of might.
    For he who of the dark ignores
    will lose the light from welcome shores.

    Behold, beware when stars be dimmed,
    be omens them, be them who sinned.
    Of tempers cowled in rile and reek,
    upwelling wrath from fathoms deep.

    'Twas done and spun without debate,
    a fierce a squall, so sought his fate.
    Be damned, be gone, 'twas written, aye,
    when tempt ye death, ’tis surely nigh.

    Who yearns in hope, who waits ashore,
    be not this wait for ever more.
    Pray God, the dawn should see him home,
    let not his fate be wept unknown.

    Rung out the night to day, anew,
    unfurled the sea as sky is blue.
    Yet rumours stirred the dawn's mystique,
    an empty dhow off Mozambique.

  • #2
    To me this is the classic Irish Seafarer poem. Great story line with impeccable flow.. I toast you Tony...

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello Bobby, I do thank you very much, kind of you indeed. Regards, Tony.

  • #3
    I second Bobby! Eloquent, evocative, a bit mysterious (I love a good mystery) and with flow and phrasing to lull the reader to a very satisfied ending. I salute you Tony! Excellent!

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello RhymeLovingWriter, Delighted you enjoyed this one and I do thank you very much. Regards, Tony.

  • #4
    This is strongly redolent of Coleridge, Romantic in concept and execution, Tony. Beware the dhow, indeed!

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello grant, Kind of you to respond and it is very much appreciated. Regards, Tony.

  • #5
    I love this piece! I enjoyed reading it out loud . :-))

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello imrogue, Delighted you enjoyed this one, I recite aloud myself when reading and writing, it gives a poem energy and a deeper understanding. Thank you very much. Regards, Tony.

  • #6
    THIS is really great. The rhyme the meter the mood. amazed by you twice tonight.

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    • Tony Grannell
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      Hello lunar glide, That I amazed you twice in one night, what can I say? Delighted with your response and it is much appreciated. Regards, Tony.

  • #7
    Tony, sometimes after reading your poems I want to stop writing!

    Please publish a book! If you cannot find a publisher, make a collection of your poems into a pdf and you can self publish on Amazon for free. Or just make a collection into pdf and send to me!

    Aside from Shakespeare and Dickinson I've never read anything that agrees with me so much! (not just this particular poem, but 95% of what you've posted so far)
    Last edited by AnatoliyS; 01-27-2017, 03:51 PM.

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