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    I drempt.
    ​​​​​Not a euphemism.
    Not a metaphor.
    I drempt.

    It seemed that
    every moment of sleep
    was invaded.

    I awoke, I reslept.
    I drempt
    as if turning the page
    to the next chapter.

    I was not afraid.
    I was confused.
    I will sleep again,
    seeking understanding
    Last edited by rhymetime; 01-18-2017, 05:23 PM.

  • #2
    Powerful foursquare simplicity whispering mystery even as it states plainly. Very affecting, rhymetime.

    (I think you may have missed out 'to' in the last line.)

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Allow me to ask a question
      V1L2 "an" or "a"?

    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      I would use 'a', but I don't think that 'an' is incorrect. It's a bit like qualifying the word 'historical': one can say 'a historical epic' or 'an historical epic'. I think it's open to choice.

    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      I Like "a" as well. I shall change it
      Thank you

  • #3
    I came I read, I finally understand not understanding. You wrote a poem of my very nocturnal life. When I do sleep. I am old but still can learn, Thank You! Touching a nerve

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you. I too am old. This serial dreaming is a new phenomenon for me. I must say I rather enjoy it even though I don't always understand the story.

  • #4
    Lovely. And sweet dreams!

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you. I am most familiar with night terrors, but the dreams of late are a pleasure to dream more of

  • #5
    Hello rhymetime, Succinct, unique and wonderful. Not afraid to sleep, to dream. To fearlessly encounter such states is to understand the waking hours, as in the subconsciousness of reality. Insightfully excellent. Very well done indeed. Regards, Tony

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you. As a dreamer of terror historically, I find these new deams refreshing, like a beautiful poem.

  • #6
    I do this often, your poem is intriguing.

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    • #7
      happy to join your community, thank you guys for useful information!
      192.168.1.1

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      • #8
        very true, resounding ending.

        thanksya.

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