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    Gargoyles
    by: Imrogue


    Grotesque layers
    horrifying,
    freakish to sight—
    Penetrated—

    Our master came
    Mold us with care
    Perfect design—
    No harm in mind

    In gross likeness
    To vomit out—
    Convey liquid—
    Divert from top

    Mortared pieces
    combined to halt
    outpouring rain
    Through crevices

    We stand alone
    In stormy nights—
    in scorching heat
    Under the sun

    Divine rescue
    Intention's cued—
    Ward off evils—
    Endlessly still





    20170111

    Last edited by imrogue; 01-12-2017, 03:29 PM.

  • #2
    I must admit that gargoyles have always sort of freaked me out. I saw a movie when I was quite young that had some gargoyles in it and it scared the wits out of me!

    Here you skillfully bring out, in strict 4 syllable count lines, the real reason they were used to decorate buildings. Very nicely done.

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    • imrogue
      imrogue commented
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      Thanks RLW! yeah they are kind of freaky. There was a cartoon show I liked to watch with the kids They were good gargoyles! lol

  • #3
    Hello imrogue, You have done with poetry what sculptors have done with chisel and stone. Excellent! Regards, Tony.

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    • imrogue
      imrogue commented
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      Thanks for a very generous, humbling compliment Tony! (blush)

  • #4
    I like the concept and your strong, simple diction here, imrogue. Excellent use of the strict syllable count! My only reservation concerns the first two lines. I feel that 'grotesque' is too obviously explicatory for poetical gargoyles (ah, adjectives...) and that 'quite' tempers the repulsive to tepid.

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    • imrogue
      imrogue commented
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      Hi Grant! Thanks for reading and commenting on this piece. I wondered before when you made a comment about the usage of the word 'quite' in one of my poems. I never understood why until now...(being a stubborn person that I am) I did not realize that there were graded and non- graded adjectives...and it does make sense to me now that I made the effort to look it up! What a learning experience for me! I really appreciate your feedback! 😊 I am now using 'horrifying' instead of 'quite repulsive' to keep the syllable count. Will that be
      better than 'detestable' (also 4 syllables) ?

      P.S.

      I kept the "grotesque" to point out the obvious form of this particular sculpture because Some gargoyles
      come in less beastly looks.
      Last edited by imrogue; 01-13-2017, 02:14 AM.

    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      I do think 'horrifying' improves markedly on 'quite repulsive'. I concede to your judgement on 'grotesque'.

  • #5
    Thanks again Grant! 😊

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