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  • It's Not That Simple

    I cannot decide if this needs more verse or if it says it all.
    What do you think?

    It's not that simple.
    Would that I was
    simply definable.
    Would that Mr. Webster could
    explain in a word or two
    how to use me in a sentence,
    how to pronounced me.

    Alas
    It's not that simple.

  • #2
    for me it works as it is

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you my friend

  • #3
    I think it's great just like this. although Webster's limitations deserves volumes 😛

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you so much

  • #4
    Beautifully written as it, rhyme time, and FAR from simple in its meaning.

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you so very much my talented and insightful friend

  • #5
    I really like the way this sounds, the rhythm - beautiful. It seems to me the beginning of a poem - one that would not necessarily be much longer - that could continue from here as from a point of departure. The last two lines, with the antique 'Alas', fall flat for me - the poem has yet to make its statement.

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      You have given me pause. I am taken deeper than originally intended.
      I'm working on it.
      Thank you
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