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    One, two, breathe,
    I exhale, remember, stop, live, breathe.
    One, two, one, two,
    You got life, your life to live.

    I sacrificed myself,
    I thought I could make you happy,
    I've been here before,
    Oh, so many times,
    Free fall in Eden's waterfall.

    I exhale, remember, one, two,
    One, two, breathe,
    Stop, love, breathe.

    I'm taking my own island,
    Today I'm standing tall,
    Just as an angry waterfall
    Cutting into colours if my Eden's waterfall.

    One, two, breathe,
    I exhale, remember, stop, live, breathe.
    One, two, one, two,
    You got life, your life to live.

    I remain a pond of still water,
    With moving sand under my feet,
    Droplets of water splashing my cheeks,
    One, two, breathe,
    I wipe your scent as I go in.

    One, two, breathe,
    I exhale, remember, stop, live, breathe.
    One, two, one, two,
    You got life, your life to live.

  • #2
    You write a lot of motion into your verse Gerryramona - I like the movement! This is reminiscent of the motions of baptism for me.

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    • #3
      This plays well, Gerryramona! Those internal thoughts after the shock of someone ending a relationship. I feel the turmoil. Yes, you have to keep strong, keep breathing, you also have your life to live!

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      • #4
        i like the repetition here as well as the work with water....
        this could be a song lyric. Gerryramona Had you intended as such?

        lines that stood out for me:
        With moving sand under my feet,
        Droplets of water splashing my cheeks,
        One, two, breathe,
        I wipe your scent as I go in.

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        • Gerryramona
          Gerryramona commented
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          Thank you!
          Yes, I intended this be a song lyrics and actually I entered it in a competition and received semifinalist position in song of the year.

        • Suz-zen
          Suz-zen commented
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          That is wonderful!!!! i do not write music but i 'hear' music when i write or read poetry!! I dream music too.... the melodies stay with me.... strange....

          I am so excited for you!! Congratulations!!!

      • #5
        oh my. I can see why you won! edens waterfall put to music must be beautiful.

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