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    What I feel is empty cold
    Like the ground I'm standing on.
    Winter is here,
    Still snow blanket
    I see it in your eyes,
    You freeze me with your touch,
    Icy breath is cutting in my skin,
    Now I am all covered in frost.

    You aim towards new heights,
    But still trying to count shooting stars,
    When the horizont is blurred,
    No more empty words
    They are frozen vapours
    Disguised in lies.

    We've changed,
    You and me, we are quite lost,
    Patience is what I need,
    Arguing is what you seek.
    No more empty words
    Frozen vapours can't reach me.

  • #2
    So sad, Gerryramona. To grow apart, or realize how different you are.

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    • #3
      I like this a lot Gerryramona
      when I first read:
      Like the ground I'm standing on.
      Winter is here,
      Still snow blanket
      I see it in your eyes,

      i was transported with the narrator right to :

      No more empty words
      Frozen vapours can't reach me.


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      • #4
        The way in which you wrote this really evokes the chill - I actually shivered a bit - thinking on how very desolate the scene appears. Excellent writing!

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        • #5
          Thank you for your kind comments!

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          • #6
            excellent frozen imagery! really well done

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