Chagrined

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Chagrined

around that time
there came a new
and different
note, affecting
verses turned right
round as skewered
block of lamb for
shawarma moist

a dupe and pawn
of flavored verse
set down for mere
enjoyment’s fare

don’t tarry there
among those notes
discordant rung
while head is hung;
another cue
is calling you
to try again
with pad and pen

to ferry lode
from heart to store
minding grace all
along the way

[Parkinsonspoet]

to ferry lode
from heart to store
minding grace all
along the way

Another wonderful write reads so well and love the ending

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you ParkinsonsPoet for the look and comment.

[Bobby Del Boy]

RLW, I'm curious, what prompted you to write this? I ask because I care about you and your writing....

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you for your concern Bobby. All is well. I was feeling less (or maybe differently) effective than my own perception last night and this is what came out when I ruminated on that.

[Bobby Del Boy]

Know the feeling poet friend.Well expressed!

[Tony Grannell]

Hello RhymeLovingWriter, The poet's journey, a lonely hunter stalked by their own words in search of a flavour in the many moods of verse. A connoisseur yourself, as witnessed by the many splendid dishes you constantly serve and especially this feast for the mind. Wonderful! Regards, Tony..

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Many thanks Tony! Sometimes we may bag more than we bargain for!

[imrogue]

Very nice RLW! Always proper—able to keep calm and and collected... I, on the otherhand —"transform" instead...

My favorite:
to ferry lode
from heart to store
minding grace all
along the way

[RhymeLovingWriter]

And your transformations are wonderful to behold! Thank you for the look and kindly comment.

[grant hayes]

Wow, structure!
A perfectly
reflective
row of squares!
And with that,
blessed, she grinned.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Grant. It did help a bit, yes.

[grant hayes]

I do like shawarma, very much. The best ones I've ever tasted were in Damascus.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Wow - I'll bet you had the real deal there! I first heard of/tried them when we lived in The Netherlands. Around here we call them gyros. I like them fine - but they are a favorite of my husband.

[lunar glide]

you don't need to mind grace RLW I think you have an excess portion and the overflow fills your poetry.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

That is a kind observation LG. I try, but fear I sometimes may get ahead of myself when pecking out words. Some poets are disciplined enough to give attention to each word, count, rhyme, intent...I so often let fly with whatever comes freshest to my inner ear and splat it out without full regard. So far, since I'm new in grand scheme of things, I've been writing more to meet the need for release within me than I have to inspire specific ideas or feelings in the reader. If it happens - then I feel doubly blessed, but I've not learned how to do it with intentionality. That's how I'd explain what I'm doing anyway. Thank you again because comments like this do encourage me that something positive is coming through, and that's a good start.

[Suz-zen]

don’t tarry there
among those notes
discordant rung
while head is hung;
another cue
is calling you
to try again
with pad and pen


Lovelovelove this!!
RhymeLovingWriter Have you ever read about diapause? this came to my mind in the best way as I see how you describe this poem's 'launching' or birth .... beautiful to watch/read as I have from the beginning your work here. I am inspired.... I also have read about grasshoppers of late. Lead there by our many writes about 'moths'.... Yes! A wonderful metaphor for all of this too!! Look up the nymph stage...all good!!! You are amazing my noteworthy nymph!!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

I love it Suz-zen! Very apt analogy. I learned too of 'instar' which is also a term I'd not known before, and wonder which stage of 'instar' I may be reflecting as I continue this writing path? I'll gladly be identified as nymph in poetic endeavor. That means there is more, much more, to come!

[Suz-zen]

ALL connected... great and small.

[DWAYNE]

Love the imagery in the first paragraph.

Great write!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Dwayne! I'm glad it painted a good picture!