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    Revolving Doors
    We’ll try again, one more time before
    We try again; then perhaps close that door
    That’s revolving within with no way out
    Both trapped inside wanting to shout
    Lacking the courage to stick out a foot
    Block the next revolution to inwardly mute
    The screaming voices within our heads
    That speak volumes whilst nothing is said

  • #2
    Acutely insightful, smoothly rhymed snapshot of relational dysfunction. Salutes all round, mooneyblack.

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    • #3
      I am not a great interpreter of poetry. I will tell you what your verse says to me

      It speaks to a decaying relationship in which neither party wants to verbalize or take the first responsible step. So we just...

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      • #4
        That speak volumes whilst nothing is said

        Yes indeed mooneyblack. And the words (or lack thereof) go round, and round, and round... Kudos!

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        • #5
          Well crafted, emotive work!

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          • #6
            Hello mooneyblack, Intriguing, encircled in the chaotic sphere of fear as if, 'We'll try again', is one urging oneself on - and on into the same rotation of no escape. I have very much enjoyed reading this. An excellent verse describing the silence of mayhem. Well done indeed. Regards, Tony.

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            • #7
              It is hard to be the one who says it's time. Round and round indeed. Nicely written and rhymed, mooneyblack!

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              • #8
                Thank you, Grant Hayes, Rhymetime, Rhyme Loving Writer, Dwayne, Tony Grannell and Muttado1sb. Your feedback is much appreciated and most encouraging. I was in this 'mayhem' quite a long time ago but was recently reminded of it when observing another relationship that appears to be caught in those revolving doors.

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