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    Chasm of Death

    Grasping the sharp edge of a cold night
    Perched precarious on a teetering ledge
    Against a frightful depression creeping
    Like wild ivy up the walls of her senses
    Blood curdling like milk in sour breasts
    Jam the pores where sweat accumulates
    In salty puddles, hardening to stiff bristle
    Scraping whole sheets of tissue from limbs
    Too weak to hold or stand - and the street
    Looming below like a great chasm of death
    Beckoning to a reluctant and hopeless lover
    It would be so easy to let go, but something
    Compels her to hold tight to the ledge
    When suddenly the darkness passes to light
    She can at last answer the burning question
    That has haunted her these Hellish days
    Yes, let's go with the pink for the kitchen tiles

  • #2
    Nooooooo! NOT THE PINK TILES! Excellent MH. To be continued?

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Well, I suppose next would be the fixtures for the sink, but I might need a real estate agent to the stars to give some referrals! Thanks for the look and the like Bobby!
      Last edited by MHenry; 11-22-2016, 08:47 PM.

  • #3
    HAhahahahahahaha, omigod, Henrician twist turned up to 11.

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thanks, grant, for the indulgence. It's been awhile since I have resorted to the Henrician turn, and I wasn't sure I wanted to lighten this darker piece up that way, but it sat there for a couple of days, and she didn't jump, so there you have it!

    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      The ending works a treat.

  • #4
    I now have a truer appreciation for the phrase 'drama queen'. I must say, your descriptive phrasing had me going right up to the end MHenry. Excellent use of sensory language to set the stage and build the tension. And Pink Tiles??? I've got the feeling someone's going to jump - even if it isn't her.

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    • #5
      Yeah, I think pink tiles was a poor choice, but I was in no position to argue with a woman on a ledge! Thank you for the look and the like, RLW!

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      • #6
        I like how dark this all appears to be, only then to giggle a bit at the very last line. Well done, sir

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you, Bry. I struggled with the ending a bit, as well as the color of the tiles. I am sure pink was a mad, mad choice. But at that point, it was out of my hands!

      • #7
        The magic of a twist performed in just one line. You make it look so easy but to do this so well and take the reader with you is a rare skill. Hats off to MHenry

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you, Pp, you are always so supportive and you are a towering voice of compassion, heart, wit, and humor. With gratitude for the time you give my work.

      • #8
        Hello MHenry, There I was deep in the dark depths of Poe and Dante when lo and behold I was reading home décor by Ikea. A poem to wait just for the ending and pretty in pink to boot. Great stuff, Tony.

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Hi, Tony, Thank you for indulging and wallowing in the darkness with me for a bit. It was a hard decision to end it at Ikea and in pink. It really had me climbing the walls! (I think I am allergic to ivy!)

      • #9
        Who to consult on such matters of grave importance LOL. Perhaps Tim the tool man Taylor. I must say you had me, I feared the worst, as the wild ivy climbed her wall.

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you, divot, I appreciate you taking the time away from birdies, eagles, and the 19th hole to read this page from my wife's journal.

      • #10
        would you believe my bathroom is pink tile! love this

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Haha! When we bought our house, it had flamingo pink tile in the bathroom! Thanks for the look, lg, and sorry about the tile!

      • #11
        Hilariously, true!

        I have witnessed such torment, in many a department store dressing room!

        Signature MHenry.

        A delightful read!

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you, Dwayne, for the visit, and for appreciating the seriousness of this dilemma we all face every day when deciding what to do for lunch!

      • #12
        Just when I wrote "all your poems make me laugh" in my comment to "A Spot of Rum", I started reading this one... I was relieved that pink tiles did save the day in the end! Once again – hilarious!

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Hi, AnatoliyS, It is good to see you again! I don't always go the for the laugh, but sometimes the laugh goes for me, which I think happened in this case! Thanks for the visit and the support! I appreciate it very much!
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