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    Beginning

    Don’t do with me
    those things you did with her
    I’m not here
    to live someone else’s dream
    nor wear her shoes…nor walk her way
    I have my own sashay

    Let go
    of what is lingering
    Embrace
    what still may be –
    our new day breaks…our new hope dawns
    Let’s not be pawns

    Of yesterday

  • #2
    Hello RhymeLovingWriter, let there be no duplicity in love only that between those lovers of the moment, unique the twain in passion's embrace, a singular love in all and in the one. A delicately composed verse aired in wisdom and empathy - just beautiful. Regards, Tony.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Tony for taking a look and leaving a like and such a nice comment!

  • #3
    Beautiful!

    Let go
    of what is lingering
    Embrace
    what still may be –

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  • #4
    Many LIKES!!! LOVE the Title!

    It all works for me RhymeLovingWriter
    ..... not here
    to live someone else’s dream
    nor wear her shoes…nor walk her way
    I have my own sashay

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      hahah! I like to think i have my own unique sashay! And i like that word A LOT!! Just read this again.,,,i have not been in a poetry zone room for a bit... time passes and i can sometimes not even be aware of it w/ my head somewhere else...enjoyed what I found upon my return.

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      It is very good to see your name in the queue. Some that were regulars when I joined are busy elsewhere also. It's interesting to me...I've never actually 'met' any of you, except through poetry, but when I see a familiar name - it makes me happy - as if running into an old friend!

    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      I feel the same way! We are old friends... know one another at a deeper level than most. Especially those of us that may be closeted writers.

  • #5
    Thanks Bison - for the look and like on this one too!

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    • #6
      Again I say Hello RLW, Somehow I read your sashay as genuine and confident but I do feel that many others out there get their sashay from carrying around that cliche. (old baggage) Sorry to say I do from time to time I have to get out the pull behind hurry to the airport and fly

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      • RhymeLovingWriter
        RhymeLovingWriter commented
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        It is meant to be confident TS - in a good way. Although I am not always confident, so don't know that I have a particular style myself! I thank you for the comment and taking time to read and engage!

    • #7
      sashay and pawns of yesterday are the parts that got me the most. i really think this poem is outstanding!

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      • RhymeLovingWriter
        RhymeLovingWriter commented
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        Oh thank you LG! I'm so glad you found it so! Thank you for taking a look and then letting me know!

      • RhymeLovingWriter
        RhymeLovingWriter commented
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        Are you ready for the super moon on Monday?

    • #8
      i know i will write something Sunday night

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      • #9
        Clear, strong, charming, simple ... zesta!

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        • RhymeLovingWriter
          RhymeLovingWriter commented
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          Many thanks again Maestro! For the look, like, and comment!

      • #10
        This great little poem reminds me of one of my favorite Dylan songs, Take Me As I Am (or Let Me Go).

        If you don't know it, you should go listen!

        Your inspired line I have my own sashay is absolutely delightful and is worth the price of admission!

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        • RhymeLovingWriter
          RhymeLovingWriter commented
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          Well, I don't know if I know that one MHenry - I'm going to check it out now - thanks! I love that you like that line. Thanks for the look, like, and tip on the song!

      • #11
        RhymeLovingWriter , I love how you sashay what you mean. To the point no messin around

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        • RhymeLovingWriter
          RhymeLovingWriter commented
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          Thanks Bobby. I'm going to have to work on my strut now - since I've claimed the sashay in this poem!

      • #12
        RhymeLovingWriter sashay away!

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