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    Rebel

    Though a rebel I have never been
    I’ve always meant to try;
    yet when urged to act by other men
    my first response is ‘why’?
    Because reasons most expounded
    fall quite phony on my ear,
    and though hilltop blare is sounded
    I won’t answer out of fear.

    So when reasoning takes moments
    that you’d rather I not spend,
    and impatience with me foments
    all those feelings you portend,
    as observer of your passion
    that has not become my own,
    I will act as no assassin
    or as pawn to pick the bone.

    If in danger, I am certain
    that a pathway which needs blazed
    can upend an iron curtain
    or admonish those unfazed.
    Though a rebel I have never been
    with each new dawn that greets,
    I will aim past shoes of other men
    in whom heart’s goodness beats.

    If I don’t espouse your calling,
    if we take disparate sides,
    I will catch you when you’re falling
    for it’s not about my pride.
    I will serve a greater Master,
    One who walked a humble way,
    for with love as boldest caster…
    I will surely win the day.

  • #2
    I'm speechless! -- "The words mean less, I'd rather pray..."

    This is SO beautiful and powerful:

    ...
    yet when urged to act by other men
    my first response is ‘why’?
    Because reasons most expounded
    fall quite phony on my ear,
    and though hilltop blare is sounded
    I won’t answer out of fear.

    ....

    I will serve a greater Master,
    One who walked a humble way,
    for with love as boldest caster…
    I will surely win the day.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      So sweet you are AnatoliyS - and so generous with praise. It warms my heart that this verse echoed well with you. Thank you for the look, like, and very edifying response.

    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      RhymeLovingWriter, Oh this is captivating!

      Powerful line:

      I will act as no assassin
      or as pawn to pick the bone.
      (Fellow poets; read this out loud!!)

      And i am glad that you now read aloud and if i had anything to do with that i am humbled. My dog is often my audience and he actually responds!

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Oh thank you Suz-zen. I don't currently have a pet at home, but my husband is pretty gracious about listening - though more often than not he gets a rather quizzical look on his face when I finish - as if to imply "Where did THAT come from?" - especially for the more abstract pieces. I'm so glad you stopped by to read - thanks for leaving a comment and a like.

  • #3
    A rebel with a better Cause. RLW, your words so crisp and pure. A d-light-full write!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks Bobby! You're kind in your comments. I'm glad it could delight!

  • #4
    The words flow like honey, each phrase following the preceding ones as if they were meant to be. You have crafted another masterpiece, RLW, which seem to come to you effortlessly.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      'Flowing like honey' is a sweet, sweet comment to hear MHenry. I''m trying to acquire the habit of reading my poems aloud before I post (which I never used to do) because that practice has been mentioned by Parkinsonspoet, Suz-zen, rhymetime (and probably others I can't remember off the top of my head) as being a good one. I thank you for the like and kindly comment.

  • #5
    Of course I read and study everything you write. In this you have found your voice. It reads so smoothly (like honey, indeed), touches the intellect and the heart with determination and insistence on moral right, yet allowing the reader to select her/his own moral right for which to stand.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      All of that? I'm nearly in happy tears reading this comment. 1) Finding a voice - something for which I've been searching 2) touches intellect and heart w/ determination and insistence on moral right - my favorite places to touch and my favorite way to do it, and 3) allowing the reading to select his/her own moral right for which to stand - yes, yes, and yes - God made us individuals with free will - no matter where that leads. I don't know if this will be the favorite poem I've ever written, but this comment will be one to which I return whenever I am in a place of doubt. For that - I humbly thank you rhymetime!

  • #6
    Beautifully composed poetry, exceptional really, in poetics, content, rhyme and a perfect balanced rhythm throughout. A most splendid command of literary English; composed with a deft hand and natural skill, gifted, I would say. A complete joy to read - the anti-rebel and yet a rebel loaded to the brim with the powerful and profound principles of peace. The poetics of humanity in four perfect stanzas. Accolades galore and then some. Regards Tony.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Many thanks Tony (welcome to the zone) for such generous attention to my efforts. I love your rebel/anti-rebel elucidation - though not intentional in formation or layout of the poem, it aptly describes my character, and I'm delighted for it to be so! Thanks for taking time to read and leave such affirming commentary.

  • #7
    Wonderful poem, RLW. Your opening made me smile ''Though a rebel I have never been / I’ve always meant to try;'' To try. And it gets better from there. Your flow and the form are very well crafted. Well done.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you so much Muttado1sb! You know, sometimes we 'closet rebels' can be pretty passionate too - and in my case it plays itself out with pen and paper. Thanks for giving this one a read and leaving a kindly comment.
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