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  • Scratching Guilt

    The guilt.
    It is the claw
    of our human hearts,
    that fights with awe
    at the walls we’ve built.

    The claw.
    It takes hold
    of our compassion,
    scratching bliss to a mold
    making wit withdraw.

    The bliss.
    It brings out
    the imperfections
    bringing hearts to doubt
    and lies for dismiss.

    The lie.
    It assures
    our guilt ridden minds
    that what we did was the cure
    and it wasn’t that sly.

    Anger.
    It drives us
    to do awful things
    but guilt with thus
    to insanity we clamber.


  • #2
    I sense a lot of passion behind these words - powerful Darthvader.

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    • #3
      Anger.
      It drives us
      to do awful things
      but guilt with thus
      to insanity we clamber

      Truer words never spoken. Love this!

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      • #4
        Thank you, rhymetime and RLW I'm glad you got the message in the peom. I always try to make it so my peoms aren't just fun words smashed together with fun meaningless rhyme added for taste, and I'm glad I got my point across. Thanks for reading and commenting rhymetime and RhymeLovingWriter

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        • #5
          LOVE this... and the form... how you take each word from the previous stanza and lead the reader.

          The message, the emotion, your talent are all very clearly shown Darthvader

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          • #6
            Thank you, Suz-zen I'm glad you liked it 😊 and thanks for reading and commenting. Your thoughts are much appreciated.

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            • Suz-zen
              Suz-zen commented
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              have read this many times. With each read more wisdom flows.... this morning what is most outstanding to me is: The claw.
              It takes hold
              of our compassion,
              scratching bliss to a mold
              making wit withdraw.

          • #7
            Darthvader Not enough LIKES on this one!! OR LOVES!!! this is really top shelf writing... as one of our true forum friends grant hayes might say, I wish i had written this!!

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            • Darthvader
              Darthvader commented
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              Wow, thank you Suz-zen that means a lot. I'm glad you liked it 😁

          • #8
            Suz-zen is right - a truly amazing poem! I am glad it has been brought back to the front page for all to see.

            There is a short sonnet I wrote a couple months ago, which shares the same topic:


            The guilt does keep you in this hell,
            It does condemn to suffer and to grieve,
            It never helps, nor does it save.
            Horrific dream you live under its spell -
            Thus suffering goes on 'till you forgive,
            Don't let illusions rule - you're not their slave.

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            • Darthvader
              Darthvader commented
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              Thank you for your kind words and for sharing your poem, AnatoliyS 😊

          • #9
            A fine poetic examination of many human emotions, Darth, in an interesting and effective structure.

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            • #10
              Thanks for reading, MHenry and thank you for your kind comment.

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              • #11
                hello Darth, Most enjoyable! To insanity we clamber!!!!

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                • #12
                  Your stanza form just pulls you in and hits you with its message. Then so does the next one. Very well done, Darth. I'm glad this got pulled up again since I did not see the original posts.

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                  • #13
                    Thank you, Muttado1sb and The second I'm so glad you liked it 😊

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                    • #14
                      I like the way you think inside your chosen topic here, resulting in the powerful metaphor of guilt as claw.

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                      • #15
                        Thank you, grant hayes I'm so glad you like it 😄

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