Scratching Guilt

[Darthvader]

The guilt.
It is the claw
of our human hearts,
that fights with awe
at the walls we’ve built.

The claw.
It takes hold
of our compassion,
scratching bliss to a mold
making wit withdraw.

The bliss.
It brings out
the imperfections
bringing hearts to doubt
and lies for dismiss.

The lie.
It assures
our guilt ridden minds
that what we did was the cure
and it wasn’t that sly.

Anger.
It drives us
to do awful things
but guilt with thus
to insanity we clamber.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

I sense a lot of passion behind these words - powerful Darthvader.

[rhymetime]

Anger.
It drives us
to do awful things
but guilt with thus
to insanity we clamber

Truer words never spoken. Love this!

[Darthvader]

Thank you, rhymetime and RLW I'm glad you got the message in the peom. I always try to make it so my peoms aren't just fun words smashed together with fun meaningless rhyme added for taste, and I'm glad I got my point across. Thanks for reading and commenting rhymetime and RhymeLovingWriter

[Suz-zen]

LOVE this... and the form... how you take each word from the previous stanza and lead the reader.

The message, the emotion, your talent are all very clearly shown Darthvader

[Darthvader]

Thank you, Suz-zen I'm glad you liked it 😊 and thanks for reading and commenting. Your thoughts are much appreciated.

[Suz-zen]

have read this many times. With each read more wisdom flows.... this morning what is most outstanding to me is: The claw.
It takes hold
of our compassion,
scratching bliss to a mold
making wit withdraw.

[Suz-zen]

Darthvader Not enough LIKES on this one!! OR LOVES!!! this is really top shelf writing... as one of our true forum friends grant hayes might say, I wish i had written this!!

[Darthvader]

Wow, thank you Suz-zen that means a lot. I'm glad you liked it 😁

[AnatoliyS]

Suz-zen is right - a truly amazing poem! I am glad it has been brought back to the front page for all to see.

There is a short sonnet I wrote a couple months ago, which shares the same topic:

The guilt does keep you in this hell,
It does condemn to suffer and to grieve,
It never helps, nor does it save.
Horrific dream you live under its spell -
Thus suffering goes on 'till you forgive,
Don't let illusions rule - you're not their slave.

[Darthvader]

Thank you for your kind words and for sharing your poem, AnatoliyS 😊

[MHenry]

A fine poetic examination of many human emotions, Darth, in an interesting and effective structure.

[Darthvader]

Thanks for reading, MHenry and thank you for your kind comment.

[The second]

hello Darth, Most enjoyable! To insanity we clamber!!!!

[Muttado1sb]

Your stanza form just pulls you in and hits you with its message. Then so does the next one. Very well done, Darth. I'm glad this got pulled up again since I did not see the original posts.

[Darthvader]

Thank you, Muttado1sb and The second I'm so glad you liked it 😊

[grant hayes]

I like the way you think inside your chosen topic here, resulting in the powerful metaphor of guilt as claw.

[Darthvader]

Thank you, grant hayes I'm so glad you like it 😄