Back a Day

[RhymeLovingWriter]

business minded was my own
intention; not on new light shone
since day before last, when hell broke
loose; delivering heavy stroke…
though double standard glared brighter –
beyond reach of lady blighter

honesty may best policy
be; yet none will admit to see
things which contradict one bias
favored for another. why has
this upset when that did not? root
deep into self-decided suit

of armor; heavy mounted on
backs already broken…since dawn
of creation. let freedom ring,
full-pleading here and now that things
on which you disagree to stave,
produce not those to dig your grave.

[grant hayes]

Okay, three sestets, aa-bb-cc rhyming eight-syllable lines, within which enjambment is queen. This is an exquisitely conceived and wrought rumination, Rhymist, very othertime sounding in its tone and syntax. I am very taken with the phrase 'self-decided suit' all on its own.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Grant. It is not my usual strict rhyme-time fare, but I'm trying to learn how to play with things a bit - maintaining structure while smoothing out flow. I like that phrase 'othertime sounding'. As always, your commentary points me to things to appreciate and improve. Many thanks for the like!

[Suz-zen]

This my favorite!!

honesty may best policy
be; yet none will admit to see
things which contradict one bias
favored for another. why has
this upset when that did not? root
deep into self-decided suit

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thanks Suz-zen!

[DWAYNE]

Brilliant contemplative rhyme.

Some very clever phrases

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Dwayne. I'm working on this style - trying to smooth things out.

[The second]

Honesty will always best policy "CHOICE" GOOD WRITE

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thanks TS - I do like honesty as a policy. Thanks for the look and nice comment!

[lunar glide]

I prefer the more playful poetic devices. this is one of my favorites from you

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you LG. I'm glad you liked it!

[MHenry]

A very interesting structure to this close examination of human interaction, asking the hard questions poetically and rhythmically. Definitely a singular creation bearing your unique signature, RLW!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Sigh...you can only imagine how joyful it was for me to see your picture and name head the queue. Glad you are back! I've been working on a new structure combining strict syllable count and rhyming using enjambment. I don't always have the fluidity or musicality of my earlier sing-song pieces, but I like the style and plan to keep working with it. Welcome back!