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    Black Moon

    Cool black scoops of moon
    Dark caves in a yellow sky
    Your hypnotic orbs
    My exotic Asian Queen
    Mysterious night Goddess

  • #2
    Tanka time - haunting tanka time - I like the word 'exotic' - and a bit of mystery is nice too. Nice write MHenry.

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    • #3
      Tanka you very much, RLW!

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      • #4
        woah. I must say the zone seems more inspired and beautiful than ever. this write has me floating in poetry heaven grandmaestro.

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you, moonwalker! I wrote this earlier today as a haiku, but was not satisfied. We had a power outage at the office just before closing time, so I came home early and rewrote this as a tanka, with which I am much more pleased.

        • RhymeLovingWriter
          RhymeLovingWriter commented
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          'floating in poetry heaven' - great title for a poem, don't you guys think?

      • #5
        I like cool black scoops of moon - as though it was some delicious new type of ice cream. Very sensual.

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you, AG! I like cool black scoops of moon, too. Licorice Ice Cream, I think! Yum!

        • Suz-zen
          Suz-zen commented
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          I agree with Alex! 'cool black scoops of moon' really stopped me!! I wanted some!

        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Hi, Suz-zen, it's nice to see you in the moon ice cream parlor!

      • #6
        MHenry, Oxymoron and paean well ascribed. I think the Moon is the most blessed celestial orb on the Zone and we know who to blame!

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you, Tanner! You have just inspired another moon poem, which I must dash off to write!

        • RhymeLovingWriter
          RhymeLovingWriter commented
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          Don't keep us waiting too long.

      • #7
        The sensibility is quite Tanneresque. So lyrical, MHenry. And no one died!

        Cool black scoops of moon

        Oo oo oo, love that.

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        • MHenry
          MHenry commented
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          Thank you for the visit, Sensei.

          Yes, Tanner has influenced my writing in general, as have you and others.
          The Asian Queen escaped carnage only because I could not find my machete before I finished this piece!

          Suz-zen also influenced this particular poem with her...

          shy sky haiku (inspired by lunar glide comment)
          08-26-2016, 11:10 AM

          Shy sky, naked dusk
          Disrobes to reveal yellow
          No longer feels blue

          so I guess I was directly and indirectly influenced by lunar glide, too!

          In the end though, the whole poem only works because of the scoops!
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