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Thank you for that it is helpful. I did not focus on format but liked my content-I will fiddle to see what could be but here I will leave it as it is.
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You know Parkinsonspoet - this is neither here nor there, but if you did want to make it a haiku (since it's so very close), all you'd need to do is take out 'the' on the first line, and add a one syllable word of your choice after 'brushes' (i.e. brushes soft, bright, bold - however you want to modify it) and you would have a haiku format.
I like it just the way it is - but Tanner's comment got me thinking. Just my two cents (which with inflation is worth more like 1/2 cent.)
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PP, this Non-Haiku has the great Japanese Haiku artists filled with jealousy of this offering.
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Thank you all . This was going to be a longer poem but I said it all in three linesso felt it was better like that,
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Empathy
The pink sky at Sunset
Blushes with empathy
As lovers hold hands
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