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Suz-zen

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shy sky haiku (inspired by lunar glide comment)

08-26-2016, 11:10 AM

Shy sky, naked dusk
Disrobes to reveal yellow
No longer feels blue
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BiocideJ

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08-26-2016, 11:12 AM

I had a sneaking suspicion I'd see something from that comment. I was thinking along the lines of the sky blushing pink being unrobed so.
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Suz-zen commented

08-26-2016, 11:20 AM

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that is good too @BiocidJ. I want to see LG's ...
MHenry

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08-26-2016, 12:19 PM

Outstanding, Suz-zen! Absolutely love this!
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08-27-2016, 02:03 PM

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thank you MH!
lunar glide

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08-26-2016, 03:29 PM

I'm beyond honored with this suz-zen. for you sky purses her lips red 😄
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08-27-2016, 02:03 PM

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without you...no haiku...
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08-28-2016, 06:48 AM

Originally posted by BiocideJ View Post

I had a sneaking suspicion I'd see something from that comment. I was thinking along the lines of the sky blushing pink being unrobed so.

I just realized I never actually complimented how good this poem was.
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Suz-zen commented

08-28-2016, 08:02 AM

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thanks!!! very thoughtful of you to come back!
AlexandratheLate

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08-28-2016, 09:36 AM

Nice take on this SuzZen. I saw it as willing to be vulnerable.
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Suz-zen commented

08-28-2016, 10:24 AM

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thank you Alexandra... vulnerability has a delicateness that at times can leave the blues behind.
rhymetime

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08-28-2016, 11:20 AM

Fantastic verse. I love the imagery and the depth you present with such simple well organized words.
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08-28-2016, 02:49 PM

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I am grateful that you have taken your time to read and comment rhymetime. i admire your work and the way you see the world!

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