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    Shy sky, naked dusk
    Disrobes to reveal yellow
    No longer feels blue

  • #2
    I had a sneaking suspicion I'd see something from that comment. I was thinking along the lines of the sky blushing pink being unrobed so.

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    • Suz-zen
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      that is good too @BiocidJ. I want to see LG's ...

  • #3
    Outstanding, Suz-zen! Absolutely love this!

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    • Suz-zen
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      thank you MH!

  • #4
    I'm beyond honored with this suz-zen. for you sky purses her lips red 😄

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    • Suz-zen
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      without you...no haiku...

  • #5
    Originally posted by BiocideJ View Post
    I had a sneaking suspicion I'd see something from that comment. I was thinking along the lines of the sky blushing pink being unrobed so.
    I just realized I never actually complimented how good this poem was.

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    • Suz-zen
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      thanks!!! very thoughtful of you to come back!

  • #6
    Nice take on this SuzZen. I saw it as willing to be vulnerable.

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    • Suz-zen
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      thank you Alexandra... vulnerability has a delicateness that at times can leave the blues behind.

  • #7
    Fantastic verse. I love the imagery and the depth you present with such simple well organized words.

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    • Suz-zen
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      I am grateful that you have taken your time to read and comment rhymetime. i admire your work and the way you see the world!
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