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    Last edited by grant hayes; 12-25-2017, 08:27 PM.

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    Perhaps this sill graces a window through which a moth once willed a pane a portal?
    Whether or not this is the case, grant Sensei, this wonderful haiku is packed with assonance - hardly a single word escaping the magic of your mighty pen!
    The image of insect pieces ushered to the loam is a peaceful and spiritual one. I expect Ghandi to appear!

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    • grant hayes
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      I didn't deliberately compose this as a sequel to the 'Moth', but once I had completed it, I realised it could serve that purpose. So, well spotted Maestro!

      It's not the ending the moth aimed for, but perhaps it gets there eventually. I'd like to think eternity might surprise us.

      Thank you for reading so attentively, MHenry.

  • #3
    I too thought of the MOTH! the moment I read this MHenry and grant hayes ... intrigued by the connection before reading comments and thought that this was the next step of how all of us, man, insect, plant are ONE in the Universe... constantly recycling.... but, who is the sweeper of the sill?

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    • Suz-zen
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      hahahahhahahahaha!!!! LOVe It!!!! i needed that!!

    • grant hayes
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      'Grim Sweeper' - yes! Kudos

    • RhymeLovingWriter
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      So clever...

  • #4
    Good question, Suz-zen. Great poem, Grant.

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    • grant hayes
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      Thank you, Rhymist. Suz-zen's 'sweeper of the sill' sounds like a promising title for a poem!

    • RhymeLovingWriter
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      Yes, it does. I'll wait for that!

    • Suz-zen
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      'sweeper of the sill'....may be the closing in the Trilogy of the Moth?

  • #5
    So does grim sweeper Grant. This connection to the moth is wonderful - so much said in such few lines. Like the dying I've seen that had so much to say but ultimately just said little.

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    • grant hayes
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      Much-in-little is the best way, I think, Alexandra, because it's memorable. Isn't it strange how we often remember a person's last words to us more than what they've spoken throughout their lives.

  • #6
    One man's trash, is another's fertilizer!

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    • grant hayes
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      Hahahahaha, true that!

  • #7
    oh my! ill never look at a sill the same. thank you

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    • #8
      Yes, I have been quite silly, lunar glide.

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