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    Anton Brooks Couldn't Decide - Eventually Found Grievous Harm

    Awkward in social situations from birth
    Anton Brooks was not one for small talk
    Avaricious to a fault, but dead broke
    Always ready to bash someone's head

    Burdened with a drunken, absent father
    Besieged by too many needy siblings
    Bothered by the women his mother liked
    Brainwashed by the preacher on the TV

    Castigated by his teachers for inattention
    Cowed by the bullies on the playground
    Creature of his crippling environment
    Cowardly Anton grew up big and mean

    Dealing in Vegas gave him carpal tunnel
    Dealing drugs gave him status and dollars
    Doping too much made him permanently dull
    Dating hookers cost him his meager health

    Eventually, Anton turned to petty theft
    Eager to join a local gang, he robbed a bank
    Expecting to gain street credibility
    Except, instead, he got caught and time

    Faithful drug dealers and hookers came
    Filling his need for smack and crack
    Fingers found their way into his stash
    Finally, he found the thief and stuck him

    Gang members shunned him for unreliability
    Gaping holes in his stories, mostly lies
    Got him in hot water and on the hit list
    Grateful for the leather belt he found

    Hung from the rafters like a gutted pig
    His innards spilled out of his big belly
    Hanging like a chandelier from some
    Horrific Gary Larson Far Side cartoon

  • #2
    Great story. Sad you stopped at H though.

    perhaps a part 2 for I through P? Hehe the story of Inigo Jones

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      That was my first thought also BJ - except that I thought it might be Anton's afterlife.

    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thanks, B, If I get ambitious, I will try to continue the story! Some flashbacks, perhaps?

  • #3
    Quite well done MHenry - carrying the alphabetical acrostic for such length, and with introductory spoiler besides. The only question I still have is - what couldn't he decide?

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thanks for the look and the like! That is a darn good question, RLW! Perhaps, I will answer that in a prequel?

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Looking forward to it!

  • #4
    Whoa!

    I can hardly take a breath.

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thank you, Dwayne!

  • #5
    This left me eagerly anticipating the next one!!!

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thanks, AG, I always find it difficult to recreate the mood and the story after I stop!

  • #6
    MHenry, Fabulous story. So many brilliant lines, one of my favourites is "Dealing in Vegas gave him carpal tunnel" but too close to home.

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thank you, Tanner, I am working on I - P, but I am daunted by Q - Z!

  • #7
    Wow, ends up a gutted pig! Can't see this going beyond H, unless perhaps it turns to the afterlife. The Ditherer's Progress? I guess the moral of this truncated alphabet is 'Be Decisive'. I'll never say um or er again.

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thanks for indulging, grant, Sensei. Whenever I attempt a follow up to a truncation, I end up with some unappealing mess. Undaunted, however, I have penned I through P.

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      I love your tenacity MHenry.

    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      She said to the guy with the bloody nose!

  • #8
    WOW! MHenry what can say?? this is so very good! your genius switch is 'on'!
    My fave is 'G'!! Quirky, Clever, witty, interesting!

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thank you, Suz-zen, for your generous praise. You, who have been on a rip-roaring run of magnificent poetic creations despite the fact you have more pressing concerns.

    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      thanks MH... appreciate it.
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