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    Bitterness

    You are my companion when I fall asleep
    The gloominess shadowing a new day
    Suffocating stranglehold that my heart keeps
    You seem to have been born along life's way

    like acid disintegrating lifelong joys
    A chilling cold reaching clear to the bones
    Nauseating unbearable background noise
    Well hidden secretly scarred painful groans

    Everyday I wake up, you're sneering at me
    Taunting and seducing with pain and tears
    But one day from this chokehold I'll be free
    receiving my smile as it slowly appears

  • #2
    This speaks of bad memories AtL. Sometimes it is so difficult to let bitterness go - but if we can't, then the hold remains on us! It's good to work through things with poetry.

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      This was written several years ago as I was in the midst of the war to survive the narcissistic man I had married. It was very painful but I knew the sun would shine again. And It has. :-)
      Last edited by AlexandratheLate; 08-24-2016, 08:58 AM.

  • #3
    ATL, OMG your ability to distill the essence of emotional pain into a beautifully-wrought poem is astonishing. I particularly identify with many lines, but especially with

    like acid disintegrating lifelong joys
    A chilling cold reaching clear to the bones

    Only a person who has been through the fire could have written this. Just lovely!

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    • #4
      Thank you very much Tanner. We are brothers in arms and survivors. :-)

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      • #5
        Yes, I know that! And know it well.

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        • #6
          Wow! AG! Powerful and hard-hitting descriptions of a toxic relationship!

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          • AlexandratheLate
            AlexandratheLate commented
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            It's not the battles we fight but how we use our scars to heal and become better for it.

        • #7
          Haunting words, but there is hope and light at the end of the poem. An emotional ride. Thanks for taking us along.

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          • AlexandratheLate
            AlexandratheLate commented
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            Thank you for reading and your comment BiocideJ.

        • #8
          AlexandratheLate I love this piece. you have captured the agony ...your first four lines are incredible.
          and the line that had me spellbound:

          Nauseating unbearable background noise


          Beautiful in its honest pain.

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          • #9
            Thank you Suz-zen. That background noise can really take hold to the point you can't think clearly. One of my favorite lines too. Thank you.

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            • #10
              This is such an eloquent articulation of the struggle to heal.

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              • #11
                Thank you Dwayne for your insightful comments.

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                • #12
                  Thank you Grant for the like. :-)

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                  • #13
                    A very powerful write AtL! Thanks for sharing

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                  • #14
                    I read tis once and then I read it again out loud. It reads beautifully and flows nicely. I hope you are now receiving my smile

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                    • #15
                      Thank you very much Pp for the smile and comment. :-)

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