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    Across the Endless Sea



    Light for me a candle

    and place it in thy window.

    That I might see thy love for me,

    from far across this endless sea

    that separates our hearts.



    Pick for me a yellow rose

    and place it in thy hair.

    That I might catch the scent of thee,

    from far across this endless sea

    that separates our hearts.



    Play for me a song of love

    upon thy golden harp.

    That I might hear a lover’s plea,

    from far across this endless sea

    that separates our hearts.



    Take from me my offered heart

    and hold it to thy breast.

    That I might thine forever be.

    Though far across this endless sea

    that separates our hearts.







  • #2
    Very nice rhymetime. A very convincing love letter to your princess across the sea.

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    • #3
      I like this rt. It is tender and has that centuries old sensibility you intended.
      As a reader, however, I like it even more when I read out the last line of each verse.

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      • #4
        Beautiful words. I love the archaic word usage that makes this seem like a poem of old. I am left wondering what the endless sea is though. My feeling is "time" but I'm not sure that entirely fits the sensory words in the full stanzas.

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        • rhymetime
          rhymetime commented
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          Thank you for taking time with my verse. Most of what I write is what it says it is. I'm not good at encryption. I hope the reader will make it what it needs to be for them. I suppose it could be distance or time. For me it is a mariner of old who may never make it home and longs to know that someone will always be waiting and watching. Yeah, I'm a romantic

      • #5
        Thanks to both of you. When I grow up I want to be Emily Dickinson. Of all the poetry ever written the romantic and classical carries my heart.

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        • #6
          Very lovely use of words and lyrical rhymmetime.

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          • rhymetime
            rhymetime commented
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            Thanks so much

        • #7
          I love this. clean, graceful, and true.

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          • rhymetime
            rhymetime commented
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            I truly appreciate your kind words about and time taken to write them

        • #8
          This is lovely!
          I'm a romantic too, but for some reason I strongly dislike most love songs/poems/romantic movies. I think I find them cliché or forced or unrealistic or something. But this is one touched my heart and hugged my soul Many likes!

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