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    Forms of Fire

    I quietly watch how the fire forms…


    ***

    Sparkles

    It started as a spark.
    As a spark inside my mind.
    My mind had gotten dark.
    Dark thoughts left undefined.

    Undefined black tinder nest.
    Nest for a fearful flame.
    Flame of a secret fearless quest.
    Quest for a meaning. An Aim.

    Aim to meet set expectations?
    Expectations made fuel for the fire.
    Fire fed by limitations.
    Limitations to desire.

    Desire cannot bear restraint.
    Restraint to pursue a true passion.
    True passion. True love. Quite quaint.
    Quaint little dreamer’s compassion...

    ***

    Flames

    My senses: yearning.
    My secrets: lit. Brain: burning.
    Regrets: on fire.

    My soul is ablaze.
    Ego and Id: both amazed.
    Hot. Greed. More. Higher.

    ***

    Ashes

    It’s the breath of the dragon, dying.
    Dying fiercely with final blow.
    Blowing fumes of heated hope.
    Hope for fuel and for air.
    Air-Rage-Loathed-Sky.
    Skylit ashes.
    Ashes lost.
    Lost to
    love.

    ***

    … and I feel blessed.
    Last edited by Pyro; 08-16-2016, 08:36 PM.

  • #2
    Wow, this is something, Pyro! Passion doused told in the strongest poetic terms. Still, blessed to have had and pursued the passion! Pick up, dust off, find another passion. There is a Universe full of them.

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      It is also cool that you used a rhyming four verse quatrain, then two haiku, and finally a nonet.

    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Hooray! I actually succeeded?!?
      Didn't know the first scheme had a name, but I kind of intentionally tried to tackle haikus and nonets thanks to your ongoing support, inspired by the brave that fearlessly led the way. Thanks for noticing, you made my day!

    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      I actually don't what the first part is called. I just rattled off something that seemed right at the time!

  • #3
    Top drawer stuff, Pyro! I really enjoy the passing of the baton between lines - and thematically, between the pieces in the suite - and the wonderful phrasing and imagery. You have sparked a fire, made it blaze, and reduced to ashes, and bottomed out with 'love'. Brilliantly conceived.

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Thank you for such a generous comment, Sensei!
      As usual, I find great support in your words and I feel honoured!

    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      And I add a word of thanks and acknowledgements to MHenry and you and all the heavy-weights on this forum (don't be too modest, you're part of a talented bunch of people here!).
      You have opened the door to a whole new poetic world of stanzas and syllables and such. You have inspired me and enabled me to challenge myself. The above write is an indirect produce of your aura. Thank you all!
      Last edited by Pyro; 08-16-2016, 05:56 PM.

  • #4
    I love poems of fire and the imagery of blazing flames and doused into smoke and ashes so symbolic. I wrote 'Waltzing through a raging fire'. This is quite wonderful Pyro!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Oh yes AtL - I went and reread that - it holds such power. Has the book been published yet? You are an amazing and strong woman.

    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Thanks AtL! I think though often unrecognised and instinctively feared, in a way, fire is universally loved as well... Common ground. Primal stuff. Fascinating.
      Thanks for sharing your poem: it is moving sadness turned into raging beauty. I like it!
      Last edited by Pyro; 08-16-2016, 05:54 PM.

  • #5
    Oh, oh, oh Pyro - I agree with these guys heartily. I love the quiet beginning and ending with the conflagration of flame blazing up the middle. Kindling, burning, and dying - and blessing all the way. Wonderfully done!

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Oh RLW!
      You never fail to put a smile on my face!
      Seeping deep into my head before
      flowing straight into the soul. It pours
      back onto the Zone. Thanks, Your Grace!

  • #6
    I feel blessed to read this pyro! you have plucked poetry right out of all kinds of fire. you are the scribe of flames

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Thank you LG! You have a way with words that's wonderfully peculiar to me...I cannot begin to explain... Then again, this peculiarity is partly explained by my inability to explain.
      Thing is: though often brief in your comments, your well-chosen words have a staggering impact and tend to leave me lost for words for a while...
      So (no offense, this is awe) I have to conclude: you are a rarity!
      Bit moonlike as well...
      Last edited by Pyro; 08-16-2016, 06:30 PM.

  • #7
    Deep iridescent write, replete with metaphor and delicately woven phrases.

    A plethora of lexical goodies here.

    Bravo!

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      You are too kind, Dwayne! In reference to what I've said above: you are a champion amongst the heavyweights of poetry. Thank you so much for the visit and comment!
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