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    (Nonet/Reverse Practice –nine of them – because you know – it seemed poetically just)

    A Week Awake

    Seven day weeks are numbered pretty
    as peaches—juicy-ripe, waiting
    to be devoured in moments
    set out neat as boxes
    heavy sweet with hope
    of doing right,
    doing well,
    all for

    as all days
    with gratitude,
    true worship of God
    in church or field. Sow good
    deeds done in service of each
    neighbor loved as self. Rest too, stands
    paramount. Remember why you breathe.

    Monday, child of bella luna bids
    newness; opportunity knocked.
    Answer day’s call with vigor
    born in renewal caught
    full-force, two-handed;
    carried along
    on strong back,
    head held

    or Tiw,
    Norse god of
    war (Roman Mars)
    now Tuesday hailed; seeks
    shiny bronze third-set place
    deep in seven, hourly drawn.
    Choice remaining, unassaulted;
    making peace an option fine instead.

    Wednesday, way of Asgard’s Odin, found
    upon the straddled hump. Pause to
    one side, seeking balance; new
    designs still possible,
    too soon to pack in
    what remains for

    the hunk
    who’s taken
    Thursday up to
    heights most women crave.
    New momentum gaining
    power; smashing limpid trace
    remaining of past confusions.
    Thunder – pound your mighty hammer strong.

    No misogyny allowed – Frigga
    turns sweet Friday’s page, looking fore
    to wildest weekend; party,
    pleasure-planned persuasive,
    maintaining focus,
    effort, now

    rung in on
    Saturn’s glowing
    belts profound. Book end
    settled, Saturday holds
    all preceding, adding last
    minute chore-full, scurrying for
    higher ground of ecstasy’s delight.

    Never moment passed as wasted. Flush
    among each pause or itemed meet,
    opportunity choiced to
    live moment fully or
    pass time ennui bound.
    Go for golden -

    ©RhymeLovingWriter 2016

  • #2
    Well, there's an eye-opener.


    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      I should probably add a Strewth! once my dropped jaw has recovered some functionality.

  • #3
    Reading this be like:

    Enjoy the videos and music you love, upload original content, and share it all with friends, family, and the world on YouTube.

    minus the tomb of Balin, unless it be my own tomb as I lay down my pen, felled by awed stupefaction.


    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      To say mere 'thank you' seems insufficient. I guess the time spent was worth it then? Thank you for your constantly gracious and encouraging comments. They do keep me wanting to reach higher heights each time I set fingers to keyboard or pen to paper.

    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      I'm kind of lost for words, Rhymist. The conception, the execution, the wit, the references, the sheer inventiveness ... all leave Likes in the dust. What in heaven's name you doing here, girl?

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Just making magic with words is all.

  • #4
    This is eye-popping stuff, RLW! The visual appeal alone could fell most readers, but those who can avoid buckled knee at the sight would read this piece and marvel at its beauty and wit. Were you to pair these daily observations with the zodiac, I believe you could have a syndicated daily column in the national news.


    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      MHenry - you too have been profuse in your kind observations - thank you! 'Eye-popping' seems superlative profound - right up there with 'strewth'! I'm not sure I could do this on a daily basis - it took most of the evening to finish this after the original concept was planted as seed in my poetry garden. For symmetry's sake, I'll need to find some twelve line or twelve point format if I follow that route. I have another idea - to do something in this form - in rhyme - though not nearly as long. It will likely have to wait for the 'morrow. Then I'll be off-line from mid-Tuesday through next weekend (another one of my summer trips - nearly the last for this year). Many thanks again - for reading and always encouraging me and giving me great ideas on how to grow my skills further.

  • #5
    I also am at a loss of words. The format, the execution -- simply outstanding!! Many more likes needed.


    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you AG. You know it is poets here in the zone, like you, who inspire me to keep trying new things. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the look, like, and your generous comment!

  • #6
    RhymeLovingWriter you are blowing my mind!!! This is really out of this world! Ditto what the others have said and add, you used one of top 5 favorite words: ennui!!

    keep writing even though you will be offline!! Your poetry garden has so many seeds and is blooming so beautifully with flowers the likes of which i have never seen.


    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      well, ennui is one of my top 5!! Don't you have some that just sound, feel and taste good ?!?!?! I wonder if the others here have any faves?? lunar glide, grant hayes @ tanner? rhymetime Bison DWAYNE MHenry? and MH do not say CAKE!! AlexandratheLate @ParkinsonPoet and the rest!!!

    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      beyond impressed RLW!!! i stared at it a while before even reading. ok. hurqalya is on my list of favorite words. I also love the names of certain elements chosen for the periodic table.

    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      @lunar glide!!! i love that huqalya is on your list...... if i could have fit that into my poem along with Delphi I would have.... i will review the periodic table... not my specialty... thank you for sharing LG!