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    I look for mine but cannot see
    It, yet it is right behind me.
    It loiters close, just out of sight
    And no twist, turn or limpid light
    Betrays it to my naked eye.

    I reach for it but cannot touch
    All of it. My strained fingers clutch
    And claw thin air. It whirls away
    Like a coquette. I'm kept at bay;
    Jilted, in defeat left to sigh.

    Is it therefore any wonder
    That like hirelings to the plunder
    Upon yours, I regale my eyes
    Whilst my hands ache to exorcise
    Its myth and its truth verify?


    (PS: I created the image to accompany this. Happy viewing! R)

  • #2
    Backs are beautiful.

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    • Raoul D'Harmental
      Raoul D'Harmental commented
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      Thanks Ceramic. They are indeed!

  • #3
    Quite the talent(s) here Raoul. This intrigued me immediately because I doubt I would have ever thought of something like this myself. Yet 'your back' is so utterly available to be noticed, as has been so deftly articulated and expounded in this piece. In short - I loved it!

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    • Raoul D'Harmental
      Raoul D'Harmental commented
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      Thanks RLW. Glad you loved this. R

  • #4
    I love the poem and the pleasing rhyme scheme, Raoul. You picked a great subject and your artwork is fantastic.

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    • Raoul D'Harmental
      Raoul D'Harmental commented
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      Thanks MHenry. I appreciate the compliment

  • #5
    Raoul this is great. It would not have occurred to me so that provides an element of discovry.It is well executed thank you

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    • Raoul D'Harmental
      Raoul D'Harmental commented
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      Thanks for the compliment Parkinsonspoet. I am glad you like this R

  • #6
    Artful expression!

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  • #7
    I loved this poem. It merits a second read to fully catch all that is being said (which I love). Great job on this.

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    • Raoul D'Harmental
      Raoul D'Harmental commented
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      Thanks for the encouraging comment! R

  • #8
    this is an excellent turn to something we do tend to ignore! I really like it

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    • Raoul D'Harmental
      Raoul D'Harmental commented
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      Thanks lunarglide. Glad you like this! R
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