Dugout

[AlexandratheLate]

This poem is about a young British soldier who parachuted into enemy territory and was injured and hid out in a dugout until he could be reunited with his brothers in arms.


Dugout

This pit, his home where he breathes, sleeps and hides
Camouflaged by dresses of greenery
Stale crumbs of bread taste like mum's apple pie
These dirt walls- always the same scenery

Loud thunderous sounds and flashes of light
Rumble the ground, seep through the dusty cracks
To keep his sanity takes all his might
Waiting for the perfect time to get back

His brothers in arms fighting for freedom
Waiting to again be reunited
Avoiding blood-thirsty goose-step demons
From the raped lands where they are not wanted

[grant hayes]

Very vivid vignette, Alexandra; a return to your longer line, I see, with much music, and an almost cinematic drama. The last stanza depicts the enemy as would the most strident recruitment poster. One small detail: if he were a British soldier, the apple pie he'd think of would be 'mum's' or 'ma's'; 'mom' is distinctively American. ☺

[AlexandratheLate]

Thank you very much Grant and I changed it. I really appreciate your catch and input.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Wonderfully done AtL! I tend to shy away from more realistic pieces like this because of my limited recall of historical detail. I'm often afraid I'm going to write a glaringly inaccurate line that negates the whole piece. This is a great job of imagining yourself in this soldier's place and writing anyway. I also appreciated Grant's catch - because I likely would have used 'mom' too!

[AlexandratheLate]

The movie was quite wonderful about his endurance and the people who risked their lives to help him and sacrificed their lives instead of giving him up to save their own.

[AlexandratheLate]

Thank you for the like Suz-zen. :-)

[MHenry]

Well written, AG! The rhymes are seamless and the story is well told. I love the first stanza the most.

[AlexandratheLate]

Thank you very much MH. I appreciate your noticing the rhyme scheme and syllables.

[Parkinsonspoet]

Alexandra I like this it paints a very compeling picture thank you

[AlexandratheLate]

Thank you very much Pp - I'm glad you read this. The movie was very compelling how our British brothers were involved and also how there were many German people who really put their lives on the line to do what they felt was morally the right thing to do in helping fellow brothers of the human race.

[Sister Greed]

I love the last 2 lines. Gorgeous.

[AlexandratheLate]

I was afraid it might be too strong SG but the movie was really compelling about the goose step marches and the obliterating and plundering the people that would not go along and also that this British young man was at the mercy of peoples' humanity in helping him survive.

[lunar glide]

you took on the horror of war like the artist you are many likes

[AlexandratheLate]

Thank you very much LG.