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    The Young Man

    Just a word, young man
    Before you pull the trigger

    But a shot rang out
    Silencing the older man
    While the young man bled to death
    Last edited by MHenry; 08-02-2016, 07:04 PM.

  • #2
    Another MH twist and quite wonderful. :-).

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thanks, AG!

  • #3
    Touche MHenry - one of your finest turns yet!

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    • MHenry
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      Thanks, RLW!

  • #4
    I like it how you used the italics very effectively in the speech and the surprise at the end!

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Thank you, acrousticrhymefan, for stopping by. I appreciate your feedback.

  • #5
    you compressed your talent for juxtapositions into five powerful lines! this is great
    Last edited by lunar glide; 08-03-2016, 09:25 AM.

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    • MHenry
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      Thank you, lg, I appreciate and value your comments!

  • #6
    I don't know why but this made me think of shawshank redemption Morgan freeman the old man and the young man.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
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      That was a powerful movie.

    • MHenry
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      which I've still never seen! I wonder how many years that has been on my to-do list?

  • #7
    oh wow. you really have to!

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