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    Sonnet III (Italian-Petrarchan)


    Better Things

    on wings of love we fly with flirting ken
    admire full-force the wit of Cupid’s bow
    with hubris unbecoming, seem to know
    or presuppose each other’s deepest yen

    quite wrong or right it settles deeper then
    to pinch close-lived a story meant to stow
    parading full what secrets kept would show
    compounding errors of what might have been

    yet now and then the arrow hits its mark
    surprised, revealing more than face displays
    presaging fruitful, lasting length of vow
    take heart when even sunlight hides in dark
    fair lover’s moon soon full reflects her rays
    then reconciled, far better things allow



    ©RhymeLovingWriter 2016

  • #2
    A delicious cornucopia of sight and sound, RLW!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you MHenry. I'm trying to go for a more contemporary voice when writing sonnets. Somehow I slip into an Elizabethan mindset with language not as native to my tongue when I try iambic pentameter, but it is a good exercise in poetic discipline, for sure.

  • #3
    This is amazing ! For the life of me I have not been able to do this!
    Writing a sonnet with what seems like ease is surely a blessing. I am so pleased to read this! Thank you RhymeLovingWriter I love this all but especially:

    presaging fruitful, lasting length of vow
    take heart when even sunlight hides in dark
    fair lover’s moon soon full reflects her rays
    then reconciled, far better things allow

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Suz-zen. If it's any consolation, I still find sonnets a challenge. I'm so glad it spoke in a happy way to you.

  • #4
    tanners haikus and your sonnets continue to blow me away. how do you do it? is it like learning an instrument or a language? after a while its just easy?

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Oh no LG - it is anything but easy for me. I really have to apply myself to finish a sonnet. Perhaps it's the challenge that draws me. I don't know many languages (only a few phrases in some) and although I've played flute and guitar (long ago), and sang all my life - all of those take practice, practice, practice to stay sharp. I'm so thankful for the affirmation I receive here, because it really is encouraging. I am only at the beginning of the poetry writing journey - and in your and these other wonderful poets' company is a wonderful place to start!
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