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    Last edited by Pyro; 06-29-2018, 08:27 AM. Reason: I'm a Fool for poetry ;) https://www.munsterlit.ie/Fool%20for%20Poetry.html

  • #2
    Oh my goodness Pyro - this reminds me of some of the great Saints of the church who have been granted visions of hell. Vivid descriptions, repeated yet altered and progressive refrain, all set the stage for this piteous lament. You have a great ability to draw the reader right in, from first phrase, and hold tight until the stinging conclusion. Wow. Just wow!

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Thanks! It started off as a little quest for stereotypes, inspired by the feel of some low-budget horror movies. Sometimes they are so predictable that it borders humour or art. I was surprised with the result. Turned out to be a bit dark.

  • #3
    NOOOOOOOOO!! From someone who suffered from night terrors this was difficult to read! Too good a write Pyro Now i must look away!

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Hooray! Sorry!
      It means that I've succeded in a way. I suffer night terrors too, but really weird ones, no resemblence to this.
      I was afraid it had become tedious.

    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      oh yes this was a success!

  • #4
    As a witching hour horror-magnet, I appreciate this dramatic and well wrought exploration, Pyro.

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      And I am thrilled that you do GH. Thank you for your kind words!

  • #5
    Engaging and well written nightmare, Pyro.
    I can relate especially to this line, which accurately describes a sensation I experience in many of my unsettling nightmares...
    I cannot hear my feeble calling

    As terrible as nightmares are, they cannot compare with the horrors of war, rape, famine, terrorism, disease, and writing poetry.

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      O dear!
      The horrors of writing poetry?
      What demons are lurking around the corner?

    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      I cannot say what demons lurk, but I would wager there is a better than even chance one of your upcoming posts will elucidate.

    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      How intriguingly daunting!

  • #6
    This is outstanding Pyro! I used to suffer from night terrors and you nailed the imagery, the feelings. Welcome and great poem!!

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Thanks AtL!

  • #7
    I still experience night terrors. this verse so perfectly and insidiously describes the absolute and incredible fear.

    Thank you - I think

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Thanks rhymetime! And you're welcome - I think

  • #8
    Pyro, I used to experience night terrors. Your write is highly graphic and descriptive, with insightful imagery.

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    • Pyro
      Pyro commented
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      Thank you Tanner!
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