Lurking Strangers

[Parkinsonspoet]

MHenry I love this apart from the end line and am not sure what to say This is just my personal reaction- All the lines are from the mind of a paranoid person the arrator but the last line from the other people for me it would flow better if the last line was a realisation from the narrators point of view.

[MHenry]

Lurking Strangers

Those lurking strangers
Whispering - furtive glances
They know I see them
I cross the street to feel safe
Still, sweat beads on my forehead

Now, they head my way
Running faster toward me
I start to panic
I speed up - should I run, too?
Nah! We miss the bus, so what!