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    I want my words to conjure magic
    I want my scent to stop you walking
    I want my hands to heal your sadness
    I want my lust to keep you grounded
    I want my songs to fill your longing
    I want my skin to taste like your skin
    I want my eyes to see you waiting
    Out there on the majestic

  • #2
    I love this, Suz-zen! A very lustful tale of longing and desire, and despite the fact every line starts with I want, it's all about bewitchment in the name and pursuit of shared passion. This is a first rate love poem!

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    • Suz-zen
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      yes lustful was a part of this for sure and love! mixed with all that bewitches! thank you MHenry!

  • #3
    Wow, Suz-zen! What MH said! First rate indeed! This make me want to be ''Out there on the majestic''

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    • Suz-zen
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      thank you @Muttado 1sb... this makes me very happy to read! i first added a noun to the last line and the 'majestic' just sounded better... felt better to me, adj. as noun. why not?? it is my world.

  • #4
    A phenomenal description of the yearning to be adored!

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    • Suz-zen
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      Good morning @DWAYNE.. thank you for reading and commenting. Adored, hypnotized and mesmerized.

  • #5
    I don't know how I missed this one Suz-zen. Beautifully expresses what we all would love to have.

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    • Suz-zen
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      thank ALT!!

  • #6
    you pulled the first line off with this one..

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  • #7
    Very satisfying write Suz-zen. And, I want more!

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    • #8
      I can subscribe to this.

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      • #9
        grant hayes i am glad!! I will write your Rx... no wait that's prescribe!!

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        • #10
          Lovely. The second line stopped me dead in my tracks!

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          • Suz-zen
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            thank you @tanner.... that was my favorite....
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