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    Brittle Beast

    Inside us
    lurks
    a brittle-tongued beast.
    His chest?
    Several times
    that of a modest man.
    His tongue?
    A verbal mace,
    protruding
    from his
    self-contented face.
    And next him,
    an empathetic soul,
    nurtured
    in the companionship
    of a common womb,
    yet
    possessed of a
    substantially sober nature.
    Endowed with
    deliberate discretion,
    vested
    with the monster's restraint.
    And he,
    of a most refined manner,
    need only
    loose the chain,
    to render the willy beast,
    a menace
    once again.
    Yet
    the spirit
    whispers admonitions,
    a chorus
    many times refrained,
    that
    what is surrendered to rage
    may never be regained.

    Last edited by DWAYNE; 07-22-2016, 08:07 AM.

  • #2
    Great, as usual! I like that this is not a single uncontrolled individual but the potential in all of us. It is so true. Even if the cause is righteous and the reason for the anger justified, when presented in rage the quality of the subject gets lost. In the end all that is remembered is the rage.

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    • #3
      Jekyll and Hyde indeed. great poem

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      • #4
        Cain and Abel. This seems a story as ancient as the Gods and as modern as Pokemon Go! Well written and pithy, as always, Dwayne!

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        • #5
          Nicely done DWAYNE. I like your descriptors, 'brittle-tongued beast' and tongue as 'verbal mace', the 'deliberate discretion', and the 'spirit whispers admonitions, a chorus many times refrained' - so, so many beautiful phrases that tickle my alliterative and assonistic fancies!

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          • #6
            So many likes Dwayne and to me it's about not giving into fleshly desires for revenge but rather letting the rational just side in ourselves win.

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            • #7
              Well done again, DWAYNE! The hard fight of our internal doctor to keep the monster inside of us in check.

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