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    Golden son

    Northern sun, golden son
    Six foot two, eyes of blue
    Infectious smile, all the while
    Hidden sadness, veiled madness

    Eery feeling, hate concealing
    Causing dread, lightly tread
    Feel obscure, insecure
    Never please, needs release

    Wants acceptance, already sentenced
    Fled from home, feels alone
    Wants to find love, fit like a glove
    Tries to fit in, uncomfortable in his skin

  • #2
    Tight rhyme scheme painting a vivid portrait of a troubled soul. Well done, AG!

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    • #3
      Thank you MH. I think the last lines need a little revamping.

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      • #4
        Thank you very much Grant. You have been missed!!

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        • #5
          rhyming is intense like the entire feeling. 😄

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          • AlexandratheLate
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            Thank you very much LG. :-)

        • #6
          This is an exceptional write, gentle and emotive.

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          • AlexandratheLate
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            Thank you very much Dwayne!! :-)

        • #7
          Sadly we probably encounter people like this every day and miss their pain. Someone will read this and think "yea,she gets it, that is exactly how it feels, maybe I'm not alone "

          Beautiful.

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          • #8
            Thank you very much rhymetime!! :-)

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            • #9
              Amazing how few, well-chosen, words can be so impacting! I've been KOed!!

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              • #10
                Thank you very much Mutaddo!!

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                • #11
                  Thank you very much Dee.

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