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    Walking on glass

    This world's numbing spiraling out of control
    entertainment, things, hopes, illusions, dreams
    Innocent child's blood spilled in a punch bowl
    Hardened deafness to humanity's screams

    You and I are slowly walking on glass
    Precariously holding on, our last breath
    The naive have become a piece of ass
    Our world is speeding to the dance of death

    Conflict in races, blind eye to the poor
    Invading privacy, freedom a lie
    Tactics to distract and keep us off-course
    It takes more work to see than to comply

    How long til this fragile glass cracks and breaks?
    We're paying a high price for those mistakes

  • #2
    Your verse is so very frightening yet so very true. I am not sure it can be turned around. We can only bring peace to our place and time. It may not seem like much but...


    "The naïve have become a piece of ass" FANTASTIC!!!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      I'm afraid too Rhymetime. Very afraid of what's happening and the illusions we live under - Fracking, keeping the poor poorer, discrimination, but we're so distracted with just trying to survive take care of our families - there is a much bigger picture here. Thank you for reading and commenting.

  • #3
    Will our final words be:God help us or? God helped us! keep writing Alexandra!

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    • AlexandratheLate
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      Thank you Bobby. Yes those are the questions.

  • #4
    One's a question and the other is the answer.

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      We've already proven we cannot do it without intervention. So true. Thank you for reading and commenting Bobby.

  • #5
    Happy 4th AG!

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  • #6
    A very powerful admonition, AG, shades of Dwayne's protest pieces, but in your own signature style. Life is fragile. Another great title followed by great poetry, AG!

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    • AlexandratheLate
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      Thank you for the comparison and praise. I feel honored, MH.

  • #7
    I know this is not the place to ask random questions but this is where I am so here it is- AG? What is the G

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Hi, rt, I dubbed AlexandratheLate, AlexandratheGreat, and I thought I was the only one who uses AG, but I see BDB did, too, at least this time!

  • #8
    Bobby and MH are very sweet and generous with their praises. My pen name is because I feel I'm a late bloomer in my observations of injustices and atrocities -- although exposed to horrific things, I sometimes am naive but they are kind and see my heart and good intentions even when I can't express them the way some of you outstanding poets do. :-).

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    • #9
      A grim prognosis from a place of honesty, beautifully structured. I've noticed your shares of late are using shorter lines, in general. They are all metered so skilfully. I salute!!

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      • AlexandratheLate
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        Thank you very much Grant for the high praise. :-).

    • #10
      'It takes more work to see than to comply' is but one of the wonderfully crafted lines/sentiments in this sonnet AtL. I've been away a few days again and here you are switched to a new style! I love it - and the passion behind your work. Truthfully, I doubt our times are any more horrific than centuries that preceded our own. The difference is that we hear/see/inhale the negativity - in fact are encouraged to feed on it by those who would profit from it - every waking minute. We can make the change - one step at a time - one person at a time - one breath at a time. I've always heard that being aware of the need for change is the departure point - and you have raised awareness here. Kudos!
      Last edited by RhymeLovingWriter; 07-05-2016, 09:13 AM.

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      • #11
        Thank you very much RLW.

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        • #12
          awareness and heartfelt expression. I wish that the world could unite behind your sentiments.

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          • AlexandratheLate
            AlexandratheLate commented
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            Me too LG. Thank you for reading and commenting.

        • #13
          So well written so thoughtprovoking I like this

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          • #14
            Thank you very much Madeline.

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            • #15
              We are indeed paying a high price.

              Skillfully done!

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