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    from answers..
    from questions so far from freedom..
    from feathers once inlaid
    on the face of the featherless moon

    so far from Selene's ardent sadness
    leaping past loves unleapable distance
    into the cumming universe

    squirting from poets' pens
    and readers magic journals
    in joyful juices of a mythopoetic renaissance
    Orphic hymns and infinite chemistry
    scorching useless dialectic imaginations
    within whom the wingbeats of Logos
    do not even stir...


    while the chamois pouches
    holding honey tobacco stars
    are stripped of turquoise and amber
    without surcease
    in a darkness also pulling
    surf from millenium waves
    scents from driftwood
    yings from yangs..

    excreting gargoyles and doves
    with trembling feathers
    into a wind of shouting seneschals
    ordering the ascent
    of the wingless night phoenix
    from a wrinkle in a coat pocket
    guided out by the dim glow
    of a nocturnal toilet bowl
    in a dream
    conjoined to a dovecoat or
    to an unspeakably perfumed columbarium...
    maybe heaven...heaven!
    Last edited by lunar glide; 07-01-2016, 08:22 AM.

  • #2
    Well that was worth the wait. I'd say more kickass than badass

    dovecoat/columbarium: I saw what you did there!

    I cannot pretend to comprehend the full scope of this work, but I sense its far reaching intricacies and appreciate its intoxicating music. I like the welter of both classical and mediaeval references, and I'm turning them over and over as I let the lines sink in. As always with you, the imagery and phrasing thereof are euphonic.

    Standing Ovation, lunar glide. Bravissimo!!

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      gh, thank you for this...dovecoat/columbarium

  • #3
    glad that you visited. I went off the deep end and my head hurts lol.

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    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      Well, mine is enjoying your profusion of images and references. I like to attempt the scaling of a poem that's an alp.

  • #4
    I second that LG. amazing imagery and the marrying of seemingly different eras and styles. Quite brilliantly done like reaching for knowledge but acquiring wisdom. Wow!!

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    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      thank you! your kindness and poetic insight is always appreciated

  • #5
    You paint with your pen, as abstract a beauty as it is impressionist.

    Excellent.

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    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      thank you very much my fellow heavy painting poet.

  • #6
    This a powerful piece full of mystery and enigma. A virtual whirlwind of well-turned phrases dancing from the cosmos, to the earth, to the final resting place on the wings of featherless birds. Very well done, lg. Consistently brilliant work!

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    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      thank you for reading and commenting! this one felt much stronger and made more sense in my head than what I was able to let out. much appreciate your ability to see poems.

  • #7
    It was beautiful to read! The way it flowed was very calming! I like it.

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    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      thank you so much!

  • #8
    Whoa there lunar glide WHOA !!! need to read this again!!

    I am reeling! 'face of the featherless moon' RIGHT there i was stopped in my tracks!


    Then you started to whip me into a frenzy with:
    squirting from poets' pens
    and readers magic journals
    in joyful juices of a mythopoetic renaissance
    Orphic hymns and infinite chemistry


    I will be back to this....

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    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      thanks for reading and commenting 😄 no need to spend too much time here I lost the thread on this one.

  • #9
    Like Grant, I will be working on the impressive work for a while -- joyfully! Leading with "from" in the opening lines, so effective in drawing in the reader and setting up the rest.
    Last edited by John Wertz; 07-03-2016, 05:38 AM.

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    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      thank you John! this is one where I got tangled up with too many ideas and went too abstract. but it was a good start lol. I appreciate your reading and I could use lessons from your sonnet ability

    • John Wertz
      John Wertz commented
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      Thanks for the compliment, but doubt I'd have much to teach you; your writing is already gliding in the cosmos. Re "tangled up," the stream of consciousness thing you have going here is wonderful.

  • #10
    There are different levels of hypnosis, this is one of the deeper ones. Someone snap their fingers so I can return. Refreshing

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    • lunar glide
      lunar glide commented
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      thank you for reading! 😄
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