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    She was

    Like a sultry wind storm briefly she came and went
    Graceful beauty draped in pitch black Chantilly lace
    Elusively mysterious aromatic scent
    Lingering, outlining her pure angelic face

    Such curvaceous body as The Sleeping Lady
    Like a lover, kissed by colors of a sunset
    Sensuous Woman curled up like a newborn baby
    Melding her surroundings as static inset

    Left like tattered trees, singed by the blistering heat
    Her raw honesty was imprinted on my skin
    Haunting vision sent my heart into full retreat
    Anxious of her dissipation, as never seen
    Last edited by AlexandratheLate; 06-18-2016, 01:04 PM.

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    Like a poet with a flowing torrent of words refreshing my imagination

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    • #3
      I love poems with this kind of unrelenting drive of phrasing and image. The word strings you've chosen have such a rich resonance and feel for assonance and consonance - my favourite things versewise.

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      • #4
        She was beautiful but you feared her also? Whoa! I like this a ton!

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        • AlexandratheLate
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          Yes Bobby. A friend of mine was speaking about a beautiful voluptuous woman and how she didn't realize how many men wanted to bed her but at the same time she was genuinely beautiful and real on the inside and intelligent which scared a lot of men because they didn't know what to make of her. Thank you my friend for reading and commenting.

        • grant hayes
          grant hayes commented
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          Men are routinely idiots. So many soulful, mindful beauties out there, and men are just unmanned by it. They should be shouting their joy to the skies.

      • #5
        Thank you very much parkinsonspoet for reading and your gracious comment.

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        • Parkinsonspoet
          Parkinsonspoet commented
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          It was a pleasure to read I wish I had more time and could read more poems here

      • #6
        Thank you very much Grant -- my favorite also Grant but challenging to keep the right 'pitch' to the end. It sure is good to have you back.
        :-)

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        • #7
          When I find such pitch of conviction and passion, Alexandra, it is good to be back.

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          • #8
            You have written a bridge to emotions I might not otherwise have shared. thank you

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            • AlexandratheLate
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              Thank you very much lunar.:-)

          • #9
            So many things to like about this one! a magical image, provocative...
            this perfection:
            Haunting vision sent my heart into full retreat
            Anxious of her dissipation, as never seen

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            • AlexandratheLate
              AlexandratheLate commented
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              Thank you very much Suz-zen. :-)

          • #10
            Love love your comment Grant!!!

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            • #11
              Hi, AG, This is a magical verse - vivid, voluptuous descriptions of a vixen, a vision, a femme fatale.

              These lines resonate particularly...
              Left like tattered trees, singed by the blustering heat
              Her raw honesty was imprinted on my skin

              Did you intend blustering, or blistering?

              I hate to be pegged as unmanned, but there is undoubtedly shock value in the aura of such a beauty, and I have experienced this shock on more than one occasion.

              I prefer to think of it more as a deer in the headlights. I posit that it is instinctual to cower, perhaps even to turn to stone by the sudden and lingering appearance of great beauty, just as it is upon encountering an ill-tempered, misanthropic, serpent-headed Harpy.

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              • AlexandratheLate
                AlexandratheLate commented
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                Yes thank you for catching that. I can see that about you. Thank you for commenting - but even beautiful people want to be loved.

              • MHenry
                MHenry commented
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                I think it is all about approachability, AG. If a great beauty is comfortable in their beauty, approachable and friendly, they will find love in abundance.
                I have a similar reaction to exceptionally tall people. I find they can be menacing or friendly, depending on how they feel about their height, and that affects how others react to them. Many attitudes can hamper approachability, but appearance alone should not (once one is over the initial shock).

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              Thank you for commenting.

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              • #13
                Thank you very much Dwayne.

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                • #14
                  Wow AtL - searing words here! I can almost sense heat rising from my computer screen while reading this! Evocative and fully effective regarding the further comments/sentiments you've shared.

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                  • #15
                    Thank you very much RLW. I appreciate your comments. :-)

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