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    The spirit
    is purposed
    to gravitate
    and spurn.
    Just as
    some seek the light
    will see the world burn!
    The confetti of triumph.
    A chorus in adulation of woe.
    For they desire
    the company of mourners.
    And misery's
    the only pleasure they know.
    Last edited by DWAYNE; 06-12-2016, 12:02 PM.

  • #2
    Welcome back Dwayne. Very poignant and so true.


    • #3
      I have missed your voice around here. confetti of triumph! my goodness


      • #4
        I love this! Speaks the truth around the world...'Just as some seek the light, others will see the world burn!' Though, I'd prefer to see the word 'watch' vs 'see' for the intent of the 'company of the mourners'... love this piece very much!


        • Muttado1sb
          Muttado1sb commented
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          I see the use of ''see'' as an active word where they are purposefully trying to make it happen, to counter ''seek'', whereas ''watch'' would make it passive and the whole poem less forceful.
          Last edited by Muttado1sb; 06-12-2016, 10:34 AM.

        • imrogue
          imrogue commented
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          I see it now what you mean... Those people being active participants versus just a watcher....It does make perfect sense! Thanks for clearing that up for me. πŸ‘πŸΌπŸ‘πŸΌ

      • #5
        Another very good and very strong poem from you DWAYNE.


        • #6
          Beautiful, Dwayne, a precision of words with monumental meaning!


          • #7
            Thank you all for the positive comments, and the constructive advice.

            I wrote this poem about a lady I encountered on my recent vacation, whose sole purpose, seemed to be, the perpetuation of misery.

            She hounded her husband into depression, she insulted the resort staff, to the point of tears.

            It made me think about the fact that we all have spheres of power and influence, and what motivates us may inspire joy or pain.

            I hope and pray that my life, perpetuates the former and not the latter.


            • #8
              Hi Dwayne, I liked your smattering of end rhyme and the rhythm of the poem throughout. "Tears? The confetti of triumph." -- very cool.