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    Young and Pretty

    Young and pretty
    Down shadowed streets
    Of a cruel city
    Where strangers meet

    A knowing glance
    And forty bucks
    A quick romance
    In a pickup truck

    If she's done well
    She'll get some smack
    A spot in Hell
    With no way back


  • #2
    Indeed a poignant writing about an all to real topic. Well done maestro...

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    • MHenry
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      Thank you, graydon! I appreciate you taking the time to look and comment.

  • #3
    The spare lines are the ideal vehicle for this grim vignette, MHenry. I thought it was going to be four syllables in every line, but saw just one exception. Not that it matters; the rhyme and meter flow just right.

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    • MHenry
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      Hi, grant, I was thinking about the fourplay, even toying with threeplay, but I have decided to play fast and loose with syllables if it suits my purpose and flows properly. I grow weary of counting knuckles and changing words to fit a form.

    • grant hayes
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      As long as it works for the ear, I am all for breaking patterns. And this works for the ear.

  • #4
    Such a strong topic said in such few words. Well done MH.

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    • MHenry
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      Thank you, AG! It is heartening to know you are reading my work and find favor.

  • #5
    Wo.

    This cuts!

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  • #6
    Hi MHenry. Powerful and true.. In my former life, don't know if I told you, I was a cop in a northeast city. I worked some vice on occasion and always found it depressing. This poem made me think of a particular prostitute who wound up a murder victim.

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    • MHenry
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      This has to be one of the toughest beats for a cop! Especially, if they have young rebellious daughters of their own! Thanks for the look, John!

  • #7
    Roxanne, you don't have to turn on the red light. This write Stings and cuts like a knife.Well done MH.

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  • #8
    I enjoy how you deal with strong subjects so directly and you disarm me with wit. 😄

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    • MHenry
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      Thank you, lunar glide! That is a very nice comment. And, if you are disarmed, you can't shoot me!

  • #9
    not even with a peashooter lol

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  • #10
    This is an alarming write... My 21 y/o daughter (17 at that time) shared a story
    about a girl from her school who had a reputation like mentioned here.
    Although a hearsay...I wondered if there was any truth in it.
    ...Thanks for sharing

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    • #11
      Thanks for reading and commenting, imrogue.
      The horrible truths out there...

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