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I like how you've used the references in this one, Muttado. You're using the form in a range of tones, which bodes very well for its expressive potential in your hands.
The first six lines are magnificent, Muttado1sb! And though the last line works, I long for something more surprising and powerful as the coup de grace!
Perhaps sacrifice the last rhyme for transcendence?!
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