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  • Lake Rubicon

    The Rubicon
    shall not be crossed
    Lake Wobegon
    shall not be lost
    Caesar tried
    Keillor sighed
    Dad's gone? Rock on!
    Last edited by Muttado1sb; 05-26-2016, 05:04 AM. Reason: Pumped up the last line. Dad's radio.

  • #2
    I like how you've used the references in this one, Muttado. You're using the form in a range of tones, which bodes very well for its expressive potential in your hands.

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thank you, grant. But really I just enjoyed rhyming Rubicon with Wobegon. When that popped in it had to go.

    • grant hayes
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      The goddess Serendipity deserves every offering laid at her blessed feet.

  • #3
    Yes - cleverly done Muttado!

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thank you, RLW.

  • #4
    Wow - clever indeed!

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thank you, Sumyanna.

  • #5
    The first six lines are magnificent, Muttado1sb! And though the last line works, I long for something more surprising and powerful as the coup de grace!
    Perhaps sacrifice the last rhyme for transcendence?!

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    • Muttado1sb
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      Well my first choice, ''This, is NPR'' was too many syllables.

    • Muttado1sb
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      Nope, I didn't go transcendant. I went with cheesy dad radio reference. Thanks, though, for pointing that out. It was too benign as it was. Enjoy!
      Last edited by Muttado1sb; 05-26-2016, 06:01 AM.
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