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    That we two should have been for so long friends
    Is a riddle that defies all reason.
    For reason I need in any season,
    Reason, and then some means to fit its ends.

    Although we looked upon the same machine,
    For my part, I would all the while
    Upon its clean and bright logic smile.
    But your laughter only mocked its sheen.

    "Bud, I see you love this order," you said,
    "But this rusted junk does not return your love;
    The primordial we stand not so much above."
    And so I've come to know... since you are dead.

  • #2
    This is profoundly bittersweet John. Your use of repetition with certain words is very effective. I like this.

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    • John Wertz
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      Thanks much RLW.

  • #3
    Bittersweet but lovely John. :-)

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    • John Wertz
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      Thanks you, Alexandra. My friend died two years ago, unexpectedly.

  • #4
    A beautifully structured work of elegiac reflection, John. Using the 'machine' as the pivot of different perspectives is masterful. And there is real sense of shock for the reader in the ending.

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    • John Wertz
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      Thanks, Grant. I am glad I was able to surprise at the end. My friend's death was a "shock" to me, although in retrospect I might have seen it coming.

    • grant hayes
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      It takes a lot of skill to make a reader care about someone who has been sketched with just a few lines of dialogue. With such deft means, you express your loss without imposing it.

      This is another work that improves with each reading, and sort of looms up to its full stature by degrees. I like it when a poem does that: the hook-n-glow.

  • #5
    It is a wonderful poem, sorry about your friend! It's hard to loose people especially unexpectedly. You wrote a beautiful tribute to your friend.

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    • #6
      Strange bedfellows at odds, one dies, the other mourns. Lovely, John, I admire a poetic recalling of true life's events.

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